EPIC, HYBRID TRAILER INSTRUMENTALS Forward

[Sonora]

So, I've seen few others had a forward for this one (btw, I listened to most of them and the tracks are FANTASTIC, congratulations everybody) and I felt I should be posting my forward as well for listing S170202EI.

My track is called Machina:

https://soundcloud.com/bsharplabs/aless ... hina-hires

It was my first forward with a full critique and the comments are great. I had 9/10 in all the sections but the screener still left some invaluable comments.
Is it ok to post here the critique? I'm not sure (in case let me know and I will avoid doing so next time) but I feel it's a great learning opportunity for all of us:
Hi Alessandro. I love the "glitch" effects you added to this cue. These embellishments really help to add appeal!
One thing to improve on is the synth sound from 1:48-1:58 as it sounds a bit outdated and thin, as compared to the other elements happening. Maybe see if you can EQ this tone for more texture and fatten it up, or swap it out for another tone that is a bit more polished. This could improve the appeal of this section.

Later on he suggested to add some electric guitars stabs at 1:46.
I'm definitively considering this changes if the tracks won't bring any deal the way it is.

[Telefunkin]

Hi Alessandro,
Great track, and congrats on the forward.
I think the screener's advice is good and I hope it helps.

[Fullertime]

You're track sounds great! I love your string motif going on. Very unique!!! Good luck with the forward.

Fuller