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Time.

Post by inga » Sun Apr 26, 2015 8:22 am

I wrote these lyrics while listening to music called Allure 4 by Little Red Church

https://soundcloud.com/graham43/allure-4

I called my lyrics " Time "


Time


Time slips by, it always runs
Powerless to stop, grains of sand
Life is gone so quickly
No matter what land
Tick Tock
Tick Tock

You and me
We ran out of time
It was not to be
Blood flows now from me
And they stand, guns in hand
Watching with disinterest

Evil men out for gain
Murder is their game
Strangers on our land
On horseback they came
Tick Tock
Tick Tock

In sand in your blue dress
You are gone ahead of me
I won't be far behind
And they stand, guns in hand
Watching with disinterest.


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Re: Time.

Post by inga » Mon Aug 01, 2016 9:37 pm

The music for "Time" is found here now -

https://soundcloud.com/graham43/allure- ... a-thinking

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Re: Time.

Post by adessell » Wed Sep 07, 2016 9:53 pm

I'm lost. This one sounds like it needs more detail. Why are you running out if time? Why is there blood? I'm just missing the whole theme here. They say after the 1st chorus maybe even the first verse the listener should know exactly what the song is about. Maybe try reworking that first verse and chorus to give us a bit more insight on what's happening.

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