Bottom Of The Bottle Blues

[LooknGlass]

Thinking of dropping a line from each verse to make them all three liners. Thoughts on the lyric, and/or suggestions are appreciated.


(Vs)
I've never been so down and out
My heart is broke, there aint no doubt
Since she's been gone, can't get no rest
I've drank so much, that there's nothin left

(Ch)
I got the bottom of, the bottle blues
She's outta love, I'm outta booze
Got the bottom of, the bottle blues
I need more to make it through
At rock bottom with more bad news
I got the bottom of the bottle blues

(Vs)
I'm too drunk to drive to the store
Not drunk enough, I need some more
Wanna drown my troubles away
Forget my pain for another day

(Ch)
I got the bottom of, the bottle blues
She's outta love, I'm outta booze
Got the bottom of, the bottle blues
I need more to make it through
At rock bottom with more bad news
I got the bottom of the bottle blues

(Vs)
I called my friend and he's on his way
He's driving over to save me today
Told him all that was going wrong
We're gonna tie a good one on

(Ch)
I got the bottom of, the bottle blues
She's outta love, I'm outta booze
Got the bottom of, the bottle blues
I need more to make it through
At rock bottom with more bad news
I got the bottom of the bottle blues

(Ch)
I got the bottom of, the bottle blues
She's outta love, I'm outta booze
Got the bottom of, the bottle blues
I need more to make it through
At rock bottom with more bad news
I got the bottom of the bottle blues
I got the bottom of the bottle blues



© L. James Tanner

[PENKSLYRICS]

A pretty tried and tested subject matter but think you have something here.

A few suggestions for improvements, in the second verse the use of drunk twice so close together doesn't read right maybe rethink those two lines. Also the third verse doesn't match the syllable count of the rest so a rethink on that as well

I also think the chorus needs tweaking slightly:

My suggestion is maybe like this

I got those bottom of the bottle blues
She's outta love, I'm outta booze
When you hit rock bottom it's sure bad news
I need some more so I don't lose
I got those bottom of the bottle blues

Best of luck with it
Roger