I need some input on this one

[ronnie35]

Hi This song has been written and rewritten many times its been on my soundcloud for a while is it good enough for a film tv indie cable etc should i send it in on a listing what does it need? it actually received a forward but nothing came of it. does it have potential? Thanks

its called I FOUND A LETTER

Ron

http://www.taxi.com/ronschultz

http://www.soundcloud.com/777rd please go to new post on the bottom of this page thanks

[TheElement]

Hi Ron, Nice piece. I'm feeling this one. I could see this in a film for sure. Doesn't have to be overly produced. simple usually seems better.

[ronnie35]

Thank you for the positive comment I just sent it, and another one to listing #u140715SS
Hope its a winner

Thanks ,Ron

[JamesCarvalho]

yup sounds
good ..

[Robtoons]

Hey Ronnie,
This is quite well written IMHO, and the recording has a funky, authentic character to it that I think could work well for TV scenes. One big stumbling block it might have is the string sample sounds obviously "midi".
Nice tune, I like it! Cheers, -Rob

[beesea]

Hi Ron
I remember hearing an early version of this at one point. Great song, and obviously memorable if I remember hearing it before. Guitars, vocals, mix, performance - all sounds great. I have to agree with Rob on the string part though - the part itself is great, but the sound playing the part could use an update. If you had a way to get a real, or more realistic string part in there, I think it would improve the whole production.

That said - I think you've got a winner here...

Cheers!
Bob

[CrimsnSyrn]

Hi Ronnie

I don't know how much you want to listen to anything I have to say, as I consider myself still learning....but

I like the song. I would've like to have the lyrics there to read along, just makes it easier.

The main thing that is sticking out to me is the vocal IMHO needs a llttle attention. I'm still wrestling with these same issues myself, but it sounds like the vocal level was too hot at some point, or it's just been over -compressed and causing excess sibilance to my ears....the tone of the vocal is not sitting right with the instrumentation, IMHO....

Also, I'd echo what Rob said about the strings. (A huge challenge for me to get those right!)

Just my 2 cents - hope you can find some value in it.

Nice tune!

Wishing you luck,

Best,

[funsongs]

fwiw: at 1:39... would have liked to hear a bowed bass line, (cello)/harmony line to the string melody, come in; and anchor in some bottom end...filling up & fattening the sound spectrum a bit.

Good song; it'll get there.
Cheers,
Peter

[ronnie35]

Thank you so much for the help here are the lyrics

I found a letter

I found a letter
;Before we say goodbye ;before we sign our names on the lineI found a letter in an old book of mine it simply said I'll be here forever I'll never leave your side
;Before you walk out that door ;before I tell ya i can't take anymore;I found a letter in an old book I had it simply saidI'll be here forever;I'll never make you feel sad So maybe there's a reason ;where we both believe in;maybe things will change ;but my thoughts become so unspeakable;there's really no one to blame;If this journey ends and we become just friends before we say its over;or I don't think of you like that anymore ;I found a letter in an old book of mine;I guess its been there a really long time;signed by you and I ;On our wedding day

also ,I took the strings out still working on my string thing sometimes they work sometimes they don't i did play a simple piano riff. Hope this helps it out give me your thoughts please.

http://www.soundcloud.com/777rd
thank you Ron

[cassmcentee]

My first listen...
Sounds great Ron!
I here a few static/clicks on the vocal

I do agree with Juliet
I would look at your vocal settings/EQ on "Love Away"
And try to copy/paste the settings to "...Letter"
Your vocal is much richer on "Love Away"
Another great tune!