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PENKSLYRICS
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Nothing Rhymed

Post by PENKSLYRICS » Sat Oct 11, 2014 5:24 am

Please give me your thoughts.
This is a recent one, not happy with the rhyme in the second verse any ideas on improving it would be appreciated.


NOTHING RHYMED

Picked up my guitar to write a song
Which started just like any other
Though this one I couldn't find the words
From the start it was a waste of time
Inspiration I just couldn't find
The whole thing seemed a little absurd

Nothing would go right
Nothing sprang to mind
Nothing would ignite
This would be the song, nothing rhymed

The music lacked any melody
Seemed everything I wrote had no flow
Really found it all so frustrating
We tried to nail it in rehearsals
But when the time came for me to sing
I would find myself suffocating

Nothing was in tune
Nothing was in time
Nothing could be heard
This would be the song, nothing rhymed

Don't know what to do
Nowhere it can go
Even lacks something
During the solo

Whatever we try it won't come right
Though it seemed to get stuck in our heads
All the crowds yawned when we played it live
The radio refused it airplay
Though even with all these negatives
Right up until now it has survived

Nothing would go right
Nothing was in tune
Nothing could be done
Still this is the song, nothing rhymed

Still this is the song, nothing rhymed

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Re: Nothing Rhymed

Post by nylyrics » Sat Nov 29, 2014 5:55 pm

Hi -

What 70 reads and no comments? So strange. I hate that. Anyway. If I were you I would listend to the who Pete Townshends
"I'm in Tune" song/lyric. Then re-write this but tie it into an emotion related to a person such as a love relationship you wanted but for some reason it just couldnt work.......

best of luck

Andy

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