This Rnb/Pop song needs great lyrics (and title..). Help?

[oshro]

Hi Folks.
Please take a listen to https://soundcloud.com/oshro/you-me-us-here
I know there is a song in there, but I need good lyrics and title (then I'll get a singer..)

If anyone wants to collaborate on this, I'm happy to share in credit, profit and the grammy this will win

[melodymessiah]

yep, there's definetly a song in there somewhere, but i think it needs a new melody, not just lyrics and title. and i think the intro is way to long and "uncommercial", i would have started it at 0:37 with what sounds like "heart beat, you me". it will set up the theme that follows in a nice way, a theme has a lovely mood and should support the chorus, which you may also have intended. with the right singer, melody and lyrics it could be turned into a great song imo. could you post the track without the vocal? i'd like to work on it.

[oshro]

Cool. Will upload lets today.