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House Lyrics

Post by NaeDae » Tue Jun 07, 2016 12:42 pm

I'm doing a song that's going for a house anthem type of pop song. I'm wondering if you guys think any of this is too repeditive or if you have ideas? Anyways here're the lyrics:

Verse 1:
I got it in the bag
And I’m not donating anything
I’ll buy a house and all that
I’ll trade my car for a limousine

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Pre:
I’m R-I-C-H rich, as in real estate
This right here is business, we don’t behave
I made it big time so I bought a plane
This is the life that I live, and you won’t see me ever complain

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Short chorus:
I’m after the money and you know I don’t care what they say anyways
I’m a zillionaire

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Verse 2:
I have a swimming pool, I have a yacht that can fit in it
All my friends think I’m so cool, my bank account is unlimited
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Pre:
I’m R-I-C-H rich, as in real estate
This right here is business, we don’t behave
I made it big time so I bought a plane
This is the life that I live, and you won’t see me ever complain
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Chorus:
I’m after the money and you know I don’t care what they say anyways
I’m a zillionaire
Cause now I’m making money every day, getting checks, and I bet
Somewhere, somebody wants to be me
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Bridge:
I know, somewhere somebody wants to be me
I know, somewhere somebody wants to be me
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Pre:
I’m R-I-C-H rich, as in real estate
This right here is business, we don’t behave
I made it big time so I bought a plane
This is the life that I live, and you won’t see me ever complain
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Chorus:
I’m after the money and you know I don’t care what they say anyways
I’m a zillionaire
Cause now I’m making money every day, getting checks, and I bet
Somewhere, somebody wants to be me

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Re: House Lyrics

Post by adessell » Wed Sep 07, 2016 10:01 pm

It's hard for me to give feedback on this one. Would you consider giving the theme a little more substance than I love money. Just needs more depth. One thing that might work is changing point of view to she loves money. That might be a step in a deeper direction. What is she doing. As you think about this maybe a better theme will pop up. Just too superficial of a theme to me

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