I think the title should be "Why Do I Pretend?"
and write a chorus around it.

Donnie,

I like this lyric a lot. However, I agree the structure could be better.

My suggestion would be to turn your current bridge into the chorus, and title this "Seeing What I Have To Give" since that strikes me as the best summary of what you are trying to say. To support this, you might need to make some additional changes, so that the verses point directly to this conclusion. Also, depending on your tune, you might need to lengthen this new chorus a little. I think you could craft a new bridge from some of the material in the existing chorus.

Good luck with you song!

Lew Lazarus

www.lewlazarus.com

In my previous note, I mentioned possibly reworking the bridge lyric to be a chorus, and said you might want to lengthen it, depending on the melody. Just to be clear, I think you would still want to keep the "seeing what I have to give" line at the end of the section, since this is the strongest location. So, if necessary, you could add material to the front or middle of the (new) chorus. You might want to start, as well as end the chorus with this thought. You have also gotten some other good suggestions from the forum, but to sum up my comments, if melody is not an issue, you might want to restructure along the following lines:

V1: In the dark, when I should be in the light
Off in the wrong direction
When I know the way that's right
Why do I pretend to be confused
When I see clearly what I need to do

Chorus: I'm seeing what I have to give
With open heart and open hand
That's how I need to live
Not clinging tight to what I have
But seeing what I have to give

V2: Is a child needing bread
Really such a mystery?
Or an old many all alone
Who just needs a friend like me?
Can I say "Gee, I don't know"
To millions who live in misery

(chorus)

Bridge: I know it's easier to say
That I don't know the way
But it's not like I don't know the truth
When its plain that I really do

(chorus)

Anyway, I may be way off base, but I hope these comments will help give you some options.

Regards,

Lew

I real liked the lyrics. Was there a typo in the line "Or an old many all alone"?
Was it suppose to be "Or an old man all alone"?

Regards,
Dave