"Hold To Me" Thoughts on lyric progression and overall feel
Posted: Tue Feb 12, 2013 10:44 am
I've been pounding out the lyrics on this song for this song the last 2 days. Write, re-write, re-write again... haha you know how it goes. I really like the first verse and the imagery that works with the story I'm trying to tell here. I was really trying to focus in on a couple metaphors that relate the terrifying moments of loneliness and insecurity we all deal with at times in life. The tunnel and the tracks, as well as heading for the light, but not really knowing if the light is freedom from the trap or just another train about to smash us. The second verse dealing with darkness and the shadows that haunt us. We try to escape the fear by shutting tight our eyes so we can't see the things we fear, but then we can never see the light and hope either. In both situations the tunnel and the darkness I wanted the resolution to be the love of action. So many times words bring no comfort and often tend to encourage guilt and insecurity, but the action of holding another in love brings about the feelings of true support and sacrifice. Anyway haha that is what I was going for. Really wondering does verse 2 work. I got a little creative with the meter and rhyme scheme, but in the context of the music it fits very well (I'll post the vocal version soon). Does the song feel cliché, or is it fresh? Any critique is appreciated.
Thanks everyone. Here's a link to the music track I have finished if you want to help put the lyrics in context.
https://soundcloud.com/mrdjchameleon/hold-to-me-inst
Just adding this in as a vocal sample after the fact
Verse 1 and chorus vocal sample to aid with lyrics!
https://soundcloud.com/mrdjchameleon/ho ... cal-sample
Verse 1
Broken fragile and you show it
You don't know what it means to be
Unafraid of life when your the one caught in the tunnel
And chasing the tracks toward the only light you ever see
And just bracing for the next wreck baby that's the moment when you ran straight into me
Chorus
I said hold to me hold to me now
I see you've taken enough
Instead of saying be tough I'm reaching out and saying
Hold to me hold to me now
You gotta hold to me hold to me now
I've seen you run for so long
Instead of saying be strong I'll take your hand and whisper
Hold to me hold to me now
You gotta hold to me hold to me now
Verse 2
Lost and frozen in the moment
And fighting for a chance to breath
You closed your eyes so tightly now to shut out the darkness
And hiding from the shadows that you pray you'll never have to see
But the light is all around you, baby till you find it you can hold closer to me
Bridge
You've taken this lonely road alone
And tried to run away from the pain
The echo of every word you've heard that's driven you oh so far
So I will simply reach out again and again and again.
Chorus
C'mon and hold to me hold to me now
I see you've taken enough
Instead of saying be tough I'm reaching out and saying
Hold to me hold to me now
You gotta hold to me hold to me now
I've seen you run for so long
Instead of saying be strong I'll take your hand and wcisper
Hold to me hold to me now
You gotta hold to me hold to me now
Thanks everyone. Here's a link to the music track I have finished if you want to help put the lyrics in context.
https://soundcloud.com/mrdjchameleon/hold-to-me-inst
Just adding this in as a vocal sample after the fact
Verse 1 and chorus vocal sample to aid with lyrics!
https://soundcloud.com/mrdjchameleon/ho ... cal-sample
Verse 1
Broken fragile and you show it
You don't know what it means to be
Unafraid of life when your the one caught in the tunnel
And chasing the tracks toward the only light you ever see
And just bracing for the next wreck baby that's the moment when you ran straight into me
Chorus
I said hold to me hold to me now
I see you've taken enough
Instead of saying be tough I'm reaching out and saying
Hold to me hold to me now
You gotta hold to me hold to me now
I've seen you run for so long
Instead of saying be strong I'll take your hand and whisper
Hold to me hold to me now
You gotta hold to me hold to me now
Verse 2
Lost and frozen in the moment
And fighting for a chance to breath
You closed your eyes so tightly now to shut out the darkness
And hiding from the shadows that you pray you'll never have to see
But the light is all around you, baby till you find it you can hold closer to me
Bridge
You've taken this lonely road alone
And tried to run away from the pain
The echo of every word you've heard that's driven you oh so far
So I will simply reach out again and again and again.
Chorus
C'mon and hold to me hold to me now
I see you've taken enough
Instead of saying be tough I'm reaching out and saying
Hold to me hold to me now
You gotta hold to me hold to me now
I've seen you run for so long
Instead of saying be strong I'll take your hand and wcisper
Hold to me hold to me now
You gotta hold to me hold to me now