Am I on the right tack? Input please..

[Tunesmith]

Well here is my latest one..I have a different reverb on the guitar, I doubled the guitar track, panned left to right, turned it 1/3 way down and put a deeper/longer reverb on the last chord. I did not use a side chain thing but am going to experiment with that soon. My DAW would not load a few I wanted so will check out others. Anyway, I think it is better than the 1st version.

Linda

http://lindacullummusic.com/wp-content/ ... Cullum.mp3

[funsongs]

Hey, Linda - more Old-Guy ears... really, really liking your rendition of this song.
My own 'critique' is a rePete of an earlier comment - and I may be all alone on this one:
if it were mine, I'd experiment with auto-mixing down about (-1db) the guitar noodle at :49-:57; and again at 2:04-2:11...
as it just slightly seems to distract from the vocal right there. It's a cool riff; would like to hear if it still works well backed off a wee bit.
Well done; good luck with the pitch.

[ronnie35]

I really like your version the lyrics fit your way much better than Donna's

Thumbs up

Ron

[Tunesmith]

Hi Peter..I will look into this..thank you!

And Ron Thank you very much! Wouldn't mind hearing your music sometime!

I wish you all were screeners!

Best of luck to you,

Linda

[funsongs]

I wish you all were screeners! Linda

And I wish that you'd wish we were all multi-platinum/zillionaire artists!

[Tunesmith]

Well this track was returned..
For:
Vocal Performance
Instrumental Performance
Recording

"Cool take on this song. I think this could be made stronger and more compelling overall if you added in some vocal layers, harmonies etc. I'd also work on getting a cleaner guitar performance and tone (there is some buzz going on right now)."

I was a little disappointed I must say..

Thanks for all your input!

Linda

[thegajman]

Damn, that is disappointing to hear Linda!

Don't let it get you down though, you did all the right things.

Sometimes the screeners are just focused on different things than what we anticipate. It's still a cool track regardless.

[Tunesmith]

Damn, that is disappointing to hear Linda!

Don't let it get you down though, you did all the right things.

Sometimes the screeners are just focused on different things than what we anticipate. It's still a cool track regardless.

Thank you! I'm working to get things right! And best of luck to you!

Linda

[funsongs]

Hi Linda.
FYI - the Soundcloud link in your signature does not respond (as least for me).

[GuitarKit]

Nice version Linda and really nicely delivered. they way you have presented it really works. I'm thinking it needs something like a B.V in the chorus or something. the reason being, that you kept the same strum throughout, so there needs to some sort of contrast to bring the chorus out a bit more. Or on the other hand, you could reduce the guitar to whole notes at some point for the contrast.
For me, the little quick licks are not necessary. they are not really in character to the rest of the piece. Maybe reduce the lick to 8th notes or play a double stop pattern?? Just my opinion for what it is worth. I certainly think you have a shot on this one.