I usually write songs from conversations I hear at morning coffee. A beautiful lady walked in and then her husband a few minutes later. One guy remarked I wonder what she sees in him. Not very nice i know. Anyhow, it got me going on this one. I don't know the name of this starter chord. It is an Am without the c note held down. That would be e b a e? ha ha Anyway if you have a moment to listen I would enjoy a comment.
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There’s gotta be somethin
(Am) She picked me …… what was she.. thinkin of (D)
..cuz I’m not very special at all (Am)……..not good
(D) lookin no I’m not even close to tall (Am)
(E) on top of a mountain … I’m hopin that I’m not gonna fall (Am)
I look in the mirror … I wonder why ..did she F G Pre
fall in love with this average guy cuz F G
I might not be pretty… I might not be cool..If D A chorus
I thought I was adorable well I’d be a fool G A
There’s gotta be somethin…sometnin bout me D A
Gotta be something… something I can’t see G A D
Confidence…it’s nuthin that I ever had.. I ain’t never even been kissed Am..D
She’s so close now…an opportunity I can’t miss
My heart is just poundin…I’ve never known a moment like this E
F#m E Fm
I guess it doesn’t matter..the way that I feel..my heart keeps tellin me that for sure it’s real
I guess it don’t matter all the reasons why…as long as I can look in those beautiful eyes
there's gotta be somethin....somethin I can't see
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I like "on top of a mountain … I’m hopin that I’m not gonna fall"
Overall, though, the lyrics might be stronger if there was more impactful imagery/metaphor in addition to the straightforward conversational lyric that you have now - maybe alternating the two would be the most powerful approach - say, conversational verses and a chorus with more imagery/metaphor -- or vice versa. Really make the listener see/feel/experience what the singer sees/feels/experiences.
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Overall, though, the lyrics might be stronger if there was more impactful imagery/metaphor in addition to the straightforward conversational lyric that you have now - maybe alternating the two would be the most powerful approach - say, conversational verses and a chorus with more imagery/metaphor -- or vice versa. Really make the listener see/feel/experience what the singer sees/feels/experiences.
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Nice one, Paul.
Gonna send you a PM, followed by an email - if you're game.
Cheers.
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Re: appreciate a listen for levels and lyrics...new song
irthlingz wrote: ↑Thu Sep 09, 2021 11:20 amI like "on top of a mountain … I’m hopin that I’m not gonna fall"
Overall, though, the lyrics might be stronger if there was more impactful imagery/metaphor in addition to the straightforward conversational lyric that you have now - maybe alternating the two would be the most powerful approach - say, conversational verses and a chorus with more imagery/metaphor -- or vice versa. Really make the listener see/feel/experience what the singer sees/feels/experiences.
JM2C
Hey first i want to say i am sorry for my comments on your last post. I read it as sarcasm because you were saying nice things after I slammed your vocal. I have some serious medical issues going on and I am a bit up tight. Still no excuse. I don't do well at lyrics. i just blurt them out. I am working on three different songs right now and rushing too much. again thanks
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No problem, I suspected that must be the case!
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