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there's gotta be somethin....somethin I can't see

Post by feaker66 » Thu Sep 09, 2021 9:10 am

I usually write songs from conversations I hear at morning coffee. A beautiful lady walked in and then her husband a few minutes later. One guy remarked I wonder what she sees in him. Not very nice i know. Anyhow, it got me going on this one. I don't know the name of this starter chord. It is an Am without the c note held down. That would be e b a e? ha ha Anyway if you have a moment to listen I would enjoy a comment.

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There’s gotta be somethin

(Am) She picked me …… what was she.. thinkin of (D)
..cuz I’m not very special at all (Am)……..not good
(D) lookin no I’m not even close to tall (Am)
(E) on top of a mountain … I’m hopin that I’m not gonna fall (Am)

I look in the mirror … I wonder why ..did she F G Pre
fall in love with this average guy cuz F G

I might not be pretty… I might not be cool..If D A chorus
I thought I was adorable well I’d be a fool G A
There’s gotta be somethin…sometnin bout me D A
Gotta be something… something I can’t see G A D

Confidence…it’s nuthin that I ever had.. I ain’t never even been kissed Am..D
She’s so close now…an opportunity I can’t miss
My heart is just poundin…I’ve never known a moment like this E
F#m E Fm
I guess it doesn’t matter..the way that I feel..my heart keeps tellin me that for sure it’s real
I guess it don’t matter all the reasons why…as long as I can look in those beautiful eyes
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Re: appreciate a listen for levels and lyrics...new song

Post by irthlingz » Thu Sep 09, 2021 11:20 am

I like "on top of a mountain … I’m hopin that I’m not gonna fall"

Overall, though, the lyrics might be stronger if there was more impactful imagery/metaphor in addition to the straightforward conversational lyric that you have now - maybe alternating the two would be the most powerful approach - say, conversational verses and a chorus with more imagery/metaphor -- or vice versa. Really make the listener see/feel/experience what the singer sees/feels/experiences.

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Re: appreciate a listen for levels and lyrics...new song

Post by funsongs » Thu Sep 09, 2021 12:07 pm

Nice one, Paul.
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Re: appreciate a listen for levels and lyrics...new song

Post by feaker66 » Thu Sep 09, 2021 1:07 pm

irthlingz wrote:
Thu Sep 09, 2021 11:20 am
I like "on top of a mountain … I’m hopin that I’m not gonna fall"

Overall, though, the lyrics might be stronger if there was more impactful imagery/metaphor in addition to the straightforward conversational lyric that you have now - maybe alternating the two would be the most powerful approach - say, conversational verses and a chorus with more imagery/metaphor -- or vice versa. Really make the listener see/feel/experience what the singer sees/feels/experiences.

JM2C

Hey first i want to say i am sorry for my comments on your last post. I read it as sarcasm because you were saying nice things after I slammed your vocal. I have some serious medical issues going on and I am a bit up tight. Still no excuse. I don't do well at lyrics. i just blurt them out. I am working on three different songs right now and rushing too much. again thanks

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Re: appreciate a listen for levels and lyrics...new song

Post by irthlingz » Thu Sep 09, 2021 6:02 pm

feaker66 wrote:
Thu Sep 09, 2021 1:07 pm
Hey first i want to say i am sorry for my comments on your last post. I read it as sarcasm because you were saying nice things after I slammed your vocal.
No problem, I suspected that must be the case!

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