Can I get opinions on this lyric please? Can it be moderernized?

[wildride]

Last night as I watched you walk away slowly
I wondered if I should really see you again
But there is something about you
And I know love never pretends

CHORUS
Cant lose you from my mind
Cant escape from you this time
No matter where I run
Or how far I go
Cant stop thinking that its you
In Every Face I See
In Every Single Face I See

I taste your skin on my lips still
The smell of you lives on in my head
Your voice it softens my ears still
There is something here that will never end

CHORUS

I know, I’ve got a |crust on me, with some imperfections
But there’s a warm sweet smell of heaven in your eyes
Sweet smell of heaven in your eyes - sweet sweet sweet

CHORUS

OUTRO
Every face I See
Every single face I see

[Casey H]

Hey Wildride
The issue first is not a matter of modernization, it's a matter of writing better song lyrics in general. 2 things: (1) It needs make sense - e.g. cohesive story and (2) It should be conversational, as people would speak to each other.

Last night as I watched you walk away slowly
I wondered if I should really see you again
But there is something about you
And I know love never pretends

You can't get her off your mind, the taste of her lips, etc. but you WONDER if you should see her again? "Walk away slowly" sounds more like she broke up with you, at least that's how the phrase hits me and probably most people.

CHORUS
Cant lose you from my mind
Cant escape from you this time
No matter where I run
Or how far I go
Cant stop thinking that its you
In Every Face I See
In Every Single Face I See

While it's cliche, "Can't get you off my mind" is the natural way a person would speak. "Can't escape from you THIS TIME"? Why this time? I think that whole line could be better. Also cliche but maybe a line ending with "try" for the rhyme would be better.

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A big problem with the song is your hook is "In Every Face I See" - you see her in every face wherever you go. But your verses don't support that. Look at the lyrics for the famous song "Always Something There To Remind Me". You want to set up the fact that you are out there, seeing faces, and you see her in every face.
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I taste your skin on my lips still
The smell of you lives on in my head
Your voice it softens my ears still
There is something here that will never end

The phrases are awkward and non-conversational. "The taste of your skin still lives on my lips" is more natural, for example. Smell lives on in your head? How bout it still fills your senses, your body, etc. Something with more relatable imagery. "Your voice it softens my ears still" is awkward like the first line. "There is something here that will never end" generally implies talking about 2 people in a relationship that will last forever. I think you mean your feelings for her will never end.

I know, I’ve got a |crust on me, with some imperfections
But there’s a warm sweet smell of heaven in your eyes
Sweet smell of heaven in your eyes - sweet sweet sweet

"Crust" isn't a great word here and that first line doesn't mesh well with the 2 that follow. If you want to start with the fact that you are not perfect, you should go with how you want her to accept you as is (If that's the point of the section). You've already used the idea of "smell" and "sweet LOOK of heaven in your eyes" would make more sense.

My suggestion is get some books on lyric writing and also study how successful song lyrics are written. And, of course, this is an opinion.

Best,
Casey

[wildride]

Thanks Casey