Conflicted Life - REVISED AGAIN

[Casey H]

REVISED

First vocal take by Steve... Still needs harmonies, a little pitch correction, final mix. Closer to final. What do you think?

https://soundcloud.com/caseyh/conflicte ... 14/s-yGLnR

Casey

CONFLICTED LIFE (Hurowitz/Collom)

(VERSE 1)
You look in the mirror
And you see two reflections
But which one will you choose
You know I’m the one who’s really in your heart
I should be right there next to you

(PRE-CHORUS)
You fall into the cracks between your love and real life
While standing on the borderline

(CHORUS)
The battle rages on
Your thoughts keep racing on
Every single little breath you take has pain
Safety is so inviting
But not that exciting
You can't live that way
Conflicted life

(VERSE 2)
The clock is ticking
With your every heartbeat
Life’s too short I think you know
But life’s too long to live with lovelessness
You have dreams, don’t let them go

REPEAT PRE-CHORUS

REPEAT CHORUS

(BRIDGE)
Can you let me walk away?
It that the price you want to pay?
oh--- oh oh
Maybe if you close one door
Another one will open more
oh--- oh oh

REPEAT PRE-CHORUS (Breakdown)
You fall into the cracks between your love and real life
While standing on the borderline

REPEAT CHORUS

[bucyboy]

This is going to be a really good one. Sounds like both lyrics work. I personally like (VERSE 2 – ALT) ...too hard to face what we both know or already know. The songs reminds me of something the band Lifehouse would do. Really nice job.

Buc

[songmaster]

I think you have a gem of a song here. The way Steve weaves the lyrics around, brings a lot of life and emotion. I'm sure the lyrics could be tweaked but only slightly. I can even see a band like "One Direction " doing this song. It has that heartfelt boy band quality.Can't wait to hear this one finished. It is really sweet. Good luck with it.

Tom

[Piewackit1]

Pitch that tune to John Mayer quick! I could see him doing this song in a heartbeat. Great job guys. I only have 2 suggestions (please take with a grain of salt). First, I wanted the bridge to move further away from the song. It seemed too close to verse/chorus to me. Second, I would like to hear an outro with a repeating vocal rather than going back to the intro riff.

Other than that solid writing.

[deantaylor]

Nice! Really good song.
I like VERSE 2 – ALT best.

[Casey H]

https://soundcloud.com/caseyh/conflicte ... 14/s-yGLnR Updated

[funsongs]

Casey...
I got a "sorry, not working" for the new link...
could be on my end of things...
please check it out; I wanna hear it!!
Cheers.

[Casey H]

OK, I fixed the link... sorry

https://soundcloud.com/caseyh/conflicte ... 14/s-yGLnR

Casey

[funsongs]

Done; thanks for the heads-up.
The new one works... gonna go listen.
Cheers.

[funsongs]

Ah... ok... this is really good; tons of potential.

2 things to consider, fwiw:

1) everything is really strong, with the exception (imho) of the line in the Chorus:
"even if not exciting"...
feels a little weak in comparison with all that surrounds it; feels a tad clumsy where others are solid;
can you convey the same meaning another way?

2) that break you're thinking of extending - why not a full instrumental over a verse? too much?
don't think it would be... might make for a dramatic re-entry to the next vocal part.

That's 2 cents' worth.

Cheers,
Peter