Feedback For My First TV Cue Attempt?

[patrickmurray]

Just joined taxi and plan on taking a stab at this listing:
MOTIVATIONAL, ACOUSTIC-Based INSTRUMENTAL CUE S211020MO.

Any advice or feedback is much appreciated. Seems like a pretty helpful community here
https://soundcloud.com/user-773231902/today-is-the-day

Thanks,
Patrick

[Zaychi]

Track not found

[patrickmurray]

Doh! I guess that's a showstopper.

The link works now. https://soundcloud.com/user-773231902/today-is-the-day

[Telefunkin]

Hi Patrick, nice job! I don't know what the refs are like or what the listing asks for, but IMHO this works well. I have a few suggestions though. The fade outs at 30s and at the end are a bit abrupt, so it'd help if you could make them sound more natural. Also, when the second guitar comes in at 1:35 it detracts from rather than compliments the other guitar, so it would be good to get some separation between them using level/EQ/dynamics perhaps (and maybe tighten the timing too). Other than that though I think its very nice and wish you well with it.

[patrickmurray]

The fade outs at 30s and at the end are a bit abrupt, so it'd help if you could make them sound more natural. Also, when the second guitar comes in at 1:35 it detracts from rather than compliments the other guitar, so it would be good to get some separation between them using level/EQ/dynamics perhaps (and maybe tighten the timing too). Other than that though I think its very nice and wish you well with it.

Thanks for the actionable feedback! Listening again - I agree

[irthlingz]

Hi Patrick - I feel the ending is a bit abrupt, almost like it just got cut off arbitrarily. Wondering if there might be a way to have more of a definitive ending cadence.

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Michael

[patrickmurray]

Thanks Michael! I working on building the end up more so it flows better.

[feaker66]

Hi I don't kow much about instrumentals etc. I just go by the way the track makes me feel. Reflection is the first things that comes to mind. Abrupt start? Maybe just that riff and one by one enter the rest? Maybe instrumentals aren't meant to do that. Anyhow nice meeting you

[patrickmurray]

Thanks Feaker!

I don't kow much about instrumentals

That makes two of us Nice meeting you too.