Feedback on song

[meandmymuse]

Hello. I wanted to gather some insight on this song I finished recently. This is a rough mix that the singer sent me, and it doesn't have the doubles, harmonies, etc. added. All opinions, ideas, suggestions, etc. are welcome. Thanks!

https://cdn.filestackcontent.com/oamgzT3jRxSJDq1wBnKO

Lyrics:

That’s Alright With Me

VERSE 1
Workin’ fire like a new year
Just in time for the Cupid cheer
Blockin’ madness as the march is on
Actin’ fools and the laugher's strong
If I may say it’s about time
For two seats in the sunshine


PRE CHORUS
Wantin' for nothin' if you’re right here
Half all of me – And could never trade
Keep each other warm when it's cold & gray


CHORUS
There’s no better place to be at this hour
Spendin' days plantin' the seeds for your flowers
Me and you are gonna weather these showers
Through and through infatuated keen vowers
That’s alright, that’s alright, And that’s alright with me


VERSE 2
Fine with skirtin’ independence
Inner child’s in attendance
It’s more than worth it - all the labor
A treat for two - oh the flavor
Just remind me to be thankful
That you’re present, Oh so faithful


PRE CHORUS
Wantin' for nothin' if you’re right here
Half all of me – And could never trade
Keep each other warm when it's cold & gray


CHORUS
There’s no better place to be at this hour
Spendin' days plantin' the seeds for your flowers
Me and you are gonna weather these showers
Through and through infatuated keen vowers
That’s alright, that’s alright, And that’s alright with me


BRIDGE
Wantin' for nothin' if you stay close
Even when away, pray to see your face
Keep each other safe in the day-to-day


CHORUS
There’s no better place to be at this hour
Spendin' days plantin' the seeds for your flowers
Me and you are gonna weather these showers
Through and through infatuated keen vowers
That’s alright, that’s alright, And that’s alright with me

[BradGray]

Hey Meandmymuse,

I think it's the start of a good track. I do like the vocals, and the lyrical phrasing. Here's what I would consider for the track:

1) Vocal Recording - Watch for "plosives" as well as those breaths. I can't tell if it was just really compressed (accentuating all the breaths) or if it was recorded that way. Also, there seems to be a phasing sound in there too, with the two vocals. I did like the two parts together.

2) Guitars - Two guitars need to go somewhere else eventually. 3 chord strumming is fine for a while, but I was kind of expecting some other song elements in there after a while. Little acoustic hooks, some fingerpicking a bass perhaps, but something that begins to build it. Having the same part so loud throughout the song, takes away from the vocal melody.

Hope that helps!
Brad

[SteveAlton]

I can hear this done with a full production...Wish the Lyrics were here to better give my opinion...Not sure you need the "That's alright, That's alright with me"...but that's without a lyric sheet...I'm sure it's fun to sing though...

I like it, but to really get an in depth crit at this point Lyrics would help...Great start

[meandmymuse]

Thanks for the feedback! I have added the lyrics.

[meandmymuse]

Hey Meandmymuse,

I think it's the start of a good track. I do like the vocals, and the lyrical phrasing. Here's what I would consider for the track:

1) Vocal Recording - Watch for "plosives" as well as those breaths. I can't tell if it was just really compressed (accentuating all the breaths) or if it was recorded that way. Also, there seems to be a phasing sound in there too, with the two vocals. I did like the two parts together.

2) Guitars - Two guitars need to go somewhere else eventually. 3 chord strumming is fine for a while, but I was kind of expecting some other song elements in there after a while. Little acoustic hooks, some fingerpicking a bass perhaps, but something that begins to build it. Having the same part so loud throughout the song, takes away from the vocal melody.

Hope that helps!
Brad

Hello, Brad. Thanks for the feedback! I will take everything into account going forward with it, in the mix, etc. A full production will probably be added later. I for sure agree that the guitar sound is aggressive and interferes with the vocal. I will discuss this with the mixing engineer. Thanks again!

[meandmymuse]

I can hear this done with a full production...Wish the Lyrics were here to better give my opinion...Not sure you need the "That's alright, That's alright with me"...but that's without a lyric sheet...I'm sure it's fun to sing though...

I like it, but to really get an in depth crit at this point Lyrics would help...Great start

Hello, Steve. I have added the lyrics. Thanks!