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First Posting of My Lyrics! Please Respond! R&B

Post by Newbie81 » Tue Mar 16, 2010 12:32 am

Hello, Fellow Taxi-Go-ers!
I am a brand new member to Taxi and I feel that the best way for me to feel welcome is to get your input on my lyrics! This is my very first post, but I want you guys to be straight forward. The song will be recorded soon if the lyrics come across well and I look forward to sharing the final product with you all. This is a mid-tempo R&B song. Here ya go!


Back to Life
2010 Derreka Walkup

V1
I had a feeling
something was wrong.
I could tell by your tone
that brother wasn't right.
But, in my mind I knew
that I could comfort you.
(Do all the things
he doesn't do.)
I've tried to realize
why you would
give yourself away.
He don't appreciate.
Its' like the love has died.
Girl, I apologize.
Now, let me love you to life.

Chorus
Heart is weak. Feeling insecure.
You deserve so much more. Let me
Love you back to life.
All the while he don't understand.
If you give me a chance, then I can
Love you back to life.
Gave your trust. Still he told you lies.
When will the pain subside. Let me
Love you back to life.
Love don't have to die. Girl, I'll tell you why.
'Cause if I'm by your side, I can
Love you back to life.

V2
Girl, when he told you
you don't deserve
the entire world
girl, that was just a lie.
You deserve so much more
than simple things
that money buys.
(Like patience
and quality time.)
Don't let the rhythm of
your heartbeat just fade away.
I'm here to rescucitate.
And keep you satisfied.
Give him his last goodbye.
And let me love you to life.

Chorus x 1

Bridge

He don't know
how precious you are.
Girl, ain't no question.
Your lovin should be a blessin.
Reawaken the love inside.
And I can love you back to life.

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Re: First Posting of My Lyrics! Please Respond! R&B

Post by Mellow D » Sun May 02, 2010 5:43 am

Hiya Newbie,

Had a read through the lyrics and I think they fit very well for the R&B pop Genre can hear someone like Usher singing it.

not overly familiar with the great lyrics in this genre but all seems clear to me in terms of the message.

Would love to hear the finished product.

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Re: First Posting of My Lyrics! Please Respond! R&B

Post by Penz2nz » Mon May 17, 2010 6:38 am

Nice work Newbie,

Only one suggestion: Make the Title "Love You Back to Life"
Wayne R Brown

"Don't let it end like this, tell them I said something." The dying words of Poncho Villa

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