Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
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Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
Appreciation is the key word for anyone who takes time to give this song ("One More Time") a listen.
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Lyrics:
A hot august night
Seagram's on ice
No kiss good-bye
My baby just left me
Yeah she left me
A midnight surprise
Gotta climb that mountain
To that heartache summit
One more time
One more time
Gotta take that lonesome ride
Ooo drivin' blind
I got raindrops in my eyes
I got faith enough
But this game of love
Sure can get tough
I'll take a little check swing
Ooo waiting for the real thing
A good streak of luck
I gotta climb that mountain
To that heartache summit
One more time
One more time
Gotta take that lonesome ride
Ooo driving blind
I got raindrops in my eyes
One door closes
Another opens
And one hand folds to a royal flush
Sometimes it's just the luck you draw
Gotta take that lonesome ride
Ooo One more time
I got raindrops in my eyes
https://pease-n-cues.sourceaudio.com/tr ... ore%20Time
Musically Yours,
Steve Knox
Nok-Nox Music BMI
615-416-3248
Lyrics:
A hot august night
Seagram's on ice
No kiss good-bye
My baby just left me
Yeah she left me
A midnight surprise
Gotta climb that mountain
To that heartache summit
One more time
One more time
Gotta take that lonesome ride
Ooo drivin' blind
I got raindrops in my eyes
I got faith enough
But this game of love
Sure can get tough
I'll take a little check swing
Ooo waiting for the real thing
A good streak of luck
I gotta climb that mountain
To that heartache summit
One more time
One more time
Gotta take that lonesome ride
Ooo driving blind
I got raindrops in my eyes
One door closes
Another opens
And one hand folds to a royal flush
Sometimes it's just the luck you draw
Gotta take that lonesome ride
Ooo One more time
I got raindrops in my eyes
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Re: Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
Hi, Steve. I would scrap the lyric, or at least weed out all the cliches. The music sounds really computer-y, which I guess is in Vogue now. Think of a strong title, write your vss TO that hook. When you have music where the chorus really pops, maybe do a guitar/ vocal instead of the C3PO route.
That's the best I can think of.
That's the best I can think of.
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Re: Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
Hi Steve
The vocals sound country. But the instruments are more R&B/Soul.
So I would either do a country style and keep the vocals, or change the vocals to an Al Green type voice.
Christopher
The vocals sound country. But the instruments are more R&B/Soul.
So I would either do a country style and keep the vocals, or change the vocals to an Al Green type voice.
Christopher
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Re: Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
Steve,
Regarding clichés: They are fine in a country song. Go country and you will be on target.
Candleman
Regarding clichés: They are fine in a country song. Go country and you will be on target.
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Re: Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
I do appreciate the review. I guess I do give up at cliche's. Thanks for the listen and comment.
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Re: Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
I think that's some mighty good singing. I agree with posts that the styles of music/groove and vocals conflict a bit.
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Re: Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
I like the groove, and the feel. It sure sounds like I can relate to the mood. A bit Walter Becker, a bit Maria Muldaur.
One thought: change the word 'she' in the 1st verse to 'they'; now anyone can sing the song. Maybe a soulful female singer would give it a different sense?
respectfully,
One thought: change the word 'she' in the 1st verse to 'they'; now anyone can sing the song. Maybe a soulful female singer would give it a different sense?
respectfully,
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Re: Help Please!! What should I do with this song?
Hey Steve, I sure enjoyed the listen. Mix and levels all sound pretty good to me, though it does sound fairly dated. However, the biggest question I have for you is: what genre do YOU think this song is? I for one certainly can't put a label on it, and that's a bad thing in our line of work.
Oh, and PS, don't - under any circumstances - utilize a fade-out ending!!
~~Matt
Oh, and PS, don't - under any circumstances - utilize a fade-out ending!!
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