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by irwin » Sat Aug 08, 2020 8:13 pm
cosmicdolphin wrote: ↑Sat Jul 25, 2020 7:20 am
I think the beat you have is okay to get started but you need to figure out the chords so you can work out the melody properly.
Hi Mark,
I have worked on the chords and melody for my song and I am respectfully asking to please have a listen.
This is the link:
https://soundcloud.com/user-148093629/h ... e-midnight
I would like to hear your thoughts, it is better sounding?.
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by cosmicdolphin » Sun Aug 09, 2020 5:55 am
irwin wrote: ↑Sat Aug 08, 2020 8:13 pm
I would like to hear your thoughts, it is better sounding?.
HI Irwin
No I'm sorry but I agree with Tom. It sounds dreadful, like something a young child would make on their first toy keyboard.
I would stick to writing lyrics for others until you've taken some actual music lessons. You can't write songs without some basic grasp of how chords and melody work, and you can't write production music with next to no production skills.
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by irwin » Mon Aug 31, 2020 6:37 pm
CTWF wrote: ↑Sun Aug 09, 2020 5:41 am
I have to say that I do not hear a song here. There is no real melody
Hi Tom, I have been working hard trying to do better than the last recording (New arrangement). So I have given it one last try, and is asking to please give me one more listen. This is my new recording. Isn't it better sounding now?.
https://soundcloud.com/irwin-abrigo/hom ... midnight-1
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by irwin » Mon Aug 31, 2020 6:46 pm
cosmicdolphin wrote: ↑Sun Aug 09, 2020 5:55 am
You can't write songs without some basic grasp of how chords and melody work, and you can't write production music with next to no production skills.
New recording and arrangements. I know you've been to the length with me on this song. Please I am asking to give me one last listen. Isn't it better sounding now.
https://soundcloud.com/irwin-abrigo/hom ... midnight-1
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by cosmicdolphin » Tue Sep 08, 2020 3:56 pm
CTWF wrote: ↑Tue Sep 08, 2020 10:34 am
Overall, the track sounds a little like a Gregorian chant performed by a robot that was laid over an otherwise totally unconnected trop-pop beat.
Genius !
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by cosmicdolphin » Tue Sep 08, 2020 4:03 pm
irwin wrote: ↑Mon Aug 31, 2020 6:46 pm
New recording and arrangements. I know you've been to the length with me on this song. Please I am asking to give me one last listen. Isn't it better sounding now.
Irwin you seem like a nice guy but Tom is right , these sound like the deranged noodlings of a madman ...now don't get me wrong I quite like strange robotic voices, quirky beats and off kilter music - it appeals to me on some bizarre level, but I've got to question what you've learned in 14 years ?
Sorry but I really don't know what the deal is here - If you really can't play and understand how music fits together go and learn it somewhere like we all had to. Or stick with writing lyrics if you don't and become really good at that
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