Let's Socialize

[irwin]

Guys I do found out the reason why the chords were harmonically clashing and I fixed it:
Please! have a listen to this 3rd version that I've redone of the song: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-3amCWQTvtI

[Telefunkin]

Sorry to say this version has all the same problems that everyone here has already pointed out. I will add my suggestion of finding a mentor that 'might' be able to help you recognise what sounds musical and what sounds non-musical to most ears (preferably someone who has achieved some success or recognition for their own music, not simply an enthusiastic friend). They might even be willing to act as a musical collaborator to help keep your music on course.

Keep having fun though .

[cosmicdolphin]

Guys I do found out the reason why the chords were harmonically clashing and I fixed it:

Irwin it's not fixed at all I'm afraid. It's obvious you need a lot more help than we can give by posting forum messages.

I think you either need to use something like EzKeys or BandInaBox as you seem to have no understanding of harmonic structure and they would allow you to at least string some chords together that don't clash.

Other than that you're going to have to pay your dues and learn to play either keys or guitar to get a solid grounding in what works harmonically.

Mark

[jefflaplante]

I'm sorry to say that the main problem here is that you are not hearing what we are hearing. A musician's most important instrument is his/her ear. (The ability to hear what sounds good and what sounds bad...which notes sound good together and which notes do not)
Have you listened to some of the music that has been forwarded on Taxi's Forwards Blog? Have you done a compare and contrast between your cues and the ones that have been forwarded? What are some of your favorite songs? favorite music artists?

[irwin]

Sorry to say this version has all the same problems that everyone here has already pointed out. I will add my suggestion of finding a mentor that 'might' be able to help you recognise what sounds musical and what sounds non-musical to most ears (preferably someone who has achieved some success or recognition for their own music, not simply an enthusiastic friend). They might even be willing to act as a musical collaborator to help keep your music on course.

Keep having fun though .

Hi Telefunkin, Thanks very much for your advice given, I am really taking these comment serious because this is what I do (write songs)

Had to give it one more last try redo, please listen and tell me the truth: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qbgZcl-3W9Y

[irwin]

Other than that you're going to have to pay your dues and learn to play either keys or guitar to get a solid grounding in what works harmonically.

Mark

Yes Mark, I give it one more last try and if still not working I'll go take classes. Please for the last time have a listen to this 4th redo: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qbgZcl-3W9Y

[irwin]

There's really no improvement from Version 1 to Version 2....

Like Mark, I'd be very interested to see how you approach making songs. Maybe you could record a step-by-step video that shows us your creation process, from having a blank workspace, to workable music bed. I'd like to see how you go about doing this, as it almost doesn't seem possible to make something so atonal without purposely trying to.

~~Matt

Hi Matt This is a new version of my song (Version 3) please be critical, give honest feedback.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qbgZcl-3W9Y

I will record a step-by-step video that shows us your creation process soon

Irwin

[martinmichelson]

Wanted to listen. But "Let's sozialize" is not open on youtube anymore.

[irwin]

Wanted to listen. But "Let's sozialize" is not open on youtube anymore.

Okay! Thanks Martin, Just need to know how much improvement if any, from 1st version to 3rd version

Please be honest. (I can take it)

This is the 1st version "Let's sozialize"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WZmka8z ... CQ&index=2

And this is the 3rd version (I renamed it) " Party people Let's sozialize"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qbgZcl- ... CQ&index=1

Sorry, I deleted the 2nd version


Irwin

[Telefunkin]

Just need to know how much improvement if any, from 1st version to 3rd version

Please be honest. (I can take it)

This is the 1st version "Let's sozialize"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WZmka8z ... CQ&index=2

And this is the 3rd version (I renamed it) " Party people Let's sozialize"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qbgZcl- ... CQ&index=1

Sorry, but its still not good news. For the first few seconds the chords and bass seemed to be in tune with each other, but at the point where the vocal comes in nothing is in tune with anything else. If you are unable to recognise that problem then no further 'guesses' at making it work are likely to be successful. Again then, it would seem that some form of assistance is needed. I hope you find someone willing to help.