For the Bridge, how about more like...
Well some look forever, for some maybe never
They live for the moment day by day
But Ill always treasure, our times together
Cause you breathed life into me
(I'm lifting the bridge lyrics from a song I penned years ago, but I think it dovetails nicely with your song.)
Nice work songmaster!
Pat
Need advice on lyrics
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Bad art can make you laugh
Good art can make you think
Great art can destroy you
- Me
(Did he just quote himself?? Yes! Yes I did!)
Good art can make you think
Great art can destroy you
- Me
(Did he just quote himself?? Yes! Yes I did!)
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Re: Need advice on lyrics
Thanks Patrick for that! I have actually rewritten the bridge again, Yes I take a lot of time getting around to things. I don't want to put the main title at the end of the bridge because it is already in the chorus. Also, this song is a little darker than the beautiful bridge you have. So far I have:
When the moon comes out
And the last of the daylight dies
With your lips on my mouth
You bring me back to life
I have also changed more of the whole song. Thanks for taking an interest
Tom
When the moon comes out
And the last of the daylight dies
With your lips on my mouth
You bring me back to life
I have also changed more of the whole song. Thanks for taking an interest
Tom
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Re: Need advice on lyrics
I was thinking:
All you had to do was breathe
should be:
All you had to do was breathe on me
All you had to do was breathe
should be:
All you had to do was breathe on me
Jerry Lee Taylor
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Thanks JLT, Yeah that could work also. I haven't looked at this song for a while. I'll have to get back to it. Thanks for the suggestion,
Tom
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