Need some Country feedback

[aubreyz]

Country --- who'da thunk it. We wrote a country song today for a listing, and I'd appreciate some input from those who are more experienced in this genre. This is a first draft-- hot off the hard disk-- piano vocal only... so some of the dead space will be filled with steel/fiddle lines. For now I'm looking at lyrics/melody. Here's the link-- and thanks as always!Graduation DayHe'd only been 18 for thirteen daysBut it felt more like a hundred yearsSince he started first gradeThe robe he wore made him look so dignifiedHe wore the tie for his mommaBut his tennis shoes were untiedThey called his name, he shook their handAnd his Momma cried for the little boy who had turned into a manIt was graduation dayTime so quickly slips awaysmiles and tearshopes and fearsnew frontiers to faceSomewayIt was graduation dayLife was on the wayHow could 20 years go by so fastHis oldest son was next in lineHe wanted his little boy backNow he knows why his momma cried on his graduation dayHe thought it was the tennis shoesBut the memories were to blameThere he goes, are those flip flopsYeah that's my boy, a chip off the old blockIt was graduation dayTime so quickly slips awaysmiles and tearshopes and fearsnew frontiers to faceSomewayIt was graduation dayLife was on the wayHe got the call, a little past 2 amHis Daddy's voice was weak on the other endHe knew right away, there was something wrongJust two words were said... she's goneIt was graduation dayLife so quickly slips awaysmiles and tearsfrom all the yearsWere written on her faceBy faithIt was graduation dayAn angel's on the way