Offering myself on the alter of peer review

[clonsberry]

Okay.. here we go. My first peer review. Heck, my first review period. I offer up Poor Boy and the Princesshttp://www.taxi.com/clonsberryI'm not going to tell you anything about it yet. But I want to hear what you have to say. I'm not afraid of constructive criticism nearly as much as I'm afraid of being that person on American Idol who's mom tells them they screech.. uh... sing.. beautifully. But at this point, I can still hide behind being a newbie in the sandbox. So, bring it on. Let's get this over with Thanks in advance!

[rtucker]

subtle, very repetitive, not much depth. Melody is pleasant and you sing well, might be nice with more instruments. 3/5. I like the stereo at the end

[dgolding]

Hiya. Not a bad song at all, I perticularly liked the bridge.The whole thing sounds very dry, especially the vocal. It sounds to me like a raw recording before any production work has been done, compression, reverb etc. As that, it has potential to my ears. Everything seems to be in tune, it's well sung, and the playing is tight. You could probably lose 30 seconds or so of what might be seen as 'padding' Good job, and best of luck with the song

[clonsberry]

Okay, it's been almost a week. I guess all the votes that are coming in are probably in. Thanks very much to both of you. I absolutely appreciate the feedback.It was inspired (just inspired, I make no claims of direct comparison or accuracy) by the relationship between Sir Paul and a previous wife and was really meant as a kind of tribute to both of them. It's one of those songs that wrote itself very easily in about 20 minutes and I wanted to give it a Beatle-esque feel. Perhaps not very "current" but sometimes you have to create just to create. That's another reason I kept the implementation very simple. I was thinking along the lines of I Will from the White Album. (I would love it if, someday, he could hear it.) Beyond that, I thought it was just a pleasent enough song. Not too deep at all but it's one of my faves.As far as it dragging out a bit, absolutely. I think I'm going to dump a lot of the musical piece at the end. I wanted to do more with it but it didn't work that way. As far as it sounding dry, it kind was on purpose. I wanted it to sound simple, upclose and personal. I suspect that's not how it comes off but I'm sure that's my own mixing in-experience. I'll have to play with it.As I said, I really appreciate your feedback. You were both helpful and very kind about it. I'm exhaling in relief.