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[Casey H]

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[deantaylor]

Casey,Good song. I really like the build to the hook! Did you consider one more 'hook' repetition at the end of the chorus? Maybe in a little different way than the other 2. I feel the audience wants it, we're waiting for it, give it to us? Maybe just at the end of the last chorus .. Make us wait until then.Only nit .. ending v2 with 'here' .. then using 'here' again at the end of line 1 in the chorus.Good work. Dean

[Casey H]

Quote:Casey,Good song. I really like the build to the hook! Did you consider one more 'hook' repetition at the end of the chorus? Maybe in a little different way than the other 2. I feel the audience wants it, we're waiting for it, give it to us? Maybe just at the end of the last chorus .. Make us wait until then.Only nit .. ending v2 with 'here' .. then using 'here' again at the end of line 1 in the chorus.Good work. DeanThanks Dean... I just noticed that same nit about the use of "here"... I didn't hear it in my own rough demo but in Keith's, the vocal improv (which is good!) on the last line of V2 brings the word "here" closer to the chorus. I'm glad that was pointed out... Casey

[deantaylor]

Casey,Yeah, I liked Keith's vocal improv there, too. He did a good job with the ROUGH.Dean

[linziellen]

Hi Casey, Excellent work, I am very impressed. The verses are very clear, obvious and easy to latch onto. I was singing to this the second time around! For some reason (I might be the only one) it cuts out probably 10 seconds before the end of the song?! I didn't get to hear the very last part, so if you haven't done already I would throw in "The breaking point is near" one last time???Great work!Lindsey

[ibanez468]

Hey guys!This sounds pretty good! Verses work for me! Can't wait ta' hear the finished product!ibanez468

[Casey H]

Quote:Casey,Yeah, I liked Keith's vocal improv there, too. He did a good job with the ROUGH.DeanI told Keith he'd go broke as a ROUGH demo producer, LOL! Lindsey: I don't know why yours is cutting out... It ends around 2:03... the demo is only 2 verses and 2 choruses...Thanks for the listens and feedback out there... Casey

[feaker]

Strumming with the ole acoustic right along with you. Nice minor chords. I have a song called temptation that is along the same lines. Your lyrics are so much better. Really paints a picture. Very catchy. Is that you singing? Good luck. Paul

[Casey H]

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[feaker]

Hi again. Just experimenting to see if by responding, it will bump this thread to top:) later