Listing S210108FT: MINIMALISTIC '50's-Style INSTRUMENTAL CUES in ALL GENRES
https://www.taxi.com/listings/S210108FT
"Please submit well-crafted '50's-style Instrumental Cues that are sparse, simple, and minimalistic. Craft your submissions around a singular motif and mood, and add and subtract layers of instrumentation to create a little dynamic variation and some forward momentum."
Here's the link to the recording: https://soundcloud.com/lancevallis/1950s-taxi
The critique says - I think you could improve this song by:
Consider the overall sound of the mix. Try an alt-mix and tame the dynamics and balance the instrumentation so nothing jumps out and there is a cohesive balance throughout. Also, introducing strategic edit points can help this get closer to the desired structure and sound.
1. The only thing I can think of is at 1:04 the volume jumps up a bit. Since it's the end of the song I figure some direction with the song getting louder towards the end makes sense. There isn't a specific spot described in the critique so I'm left to guess.
2. What are edit points?
Performance
There are tuning, rhythm, or dissonance issues
I returned or forwarded this song because
The track has a good period feel, although, it could benefit from a revision in the mix/structure to meet the listing's criteria.
What criteria in the listing is being addressed here? The listing says "Please submit well-crafted '50's-style Instrumental Cues that are sparse, simple, and minimalistic. Craft your submissions around a singular motif and mood, and add and subtract layers of instrumentation to create a little dynamic variation and some forward momentum." None of these descriptors is mentioned in the critique.
I've received a few critiques from previous submissions that I understood where they were coming from but this one is not clear to me. Would appreciate any insight you have to offer.