Am I Asking Too Much? **new mix 12 Nov

[watksco]

Finally got this one sung!Is the title alright??As always - All comments welcome http://www.reverbnation.com/tunepak/2001103Am I Asking Too Much?Verse 1: I'll take a deep breathAnd one last look aroundThen I look to you for a reason to stayI’ll push back my tearsCan’t fall to pieces nowBut your last chance is ticking awayPre-Ch 1: I can make the taxi waitBut then you’ve got nothing left to sayChorus: Am I asking too muchWhen I want you to act like a man in love?Am I asking too much, ‘Cause I wanna feel like I’m more than enough?And if you don’t bend / It’s all gonna breakAm I asking too much?Verse 2: I wanted flowersBut you just rolled your eyesAnd then you want me to fall at your feetI gave you so muchIt’s time that I had mineI'm moving out of this one way streetPre-Ch 2: I’ve got so much more to beAnd there are some things a girl needsChorus: (repeat)Bridge: Gonna find myself / Maybe someone else‘Cause I can’t do lonely no moreGonna let you see / What it is to miss meAs soon as I close this doorChorus: (repeat)Chorus (Outro Adlib):Am I asking too much,to feel like I’m enough?wanna feel like I'm enoughAnd it's too muchAnd it's too muchAnd it’s all gonna breakAll gonna breakAm I asking too much?© Scott Watkins 2009

[heckxx]

Definitely a nice little tune, great melodies, rhythms, hooks. I heard a funny bass guitar note in the early part of the verse, sounded off or dissonant.You definitely need to get a female to sing this, though, if that's the ultimate intention of the song, so that you can tell if the range of the vocals are right. And if you have to transpose the song, does it still sound right in the guitars. Hope this helps! -Jeff

[toddt]

Hi Scott,This one's got some very good potential.There are some small lyrical refinements I think you could make - i.e. in the chorus, "guy" might be a more universal word to use instead of "man" IMO. Also, instead of "I want me to feel", maybe "I just want to feel" which is more conversational?Also, maybe ending the chorus on a different chord under "much' might be more interesting.Good work though mate, I look forward to hearing it develop.

[watksco]

Thanks for the listen and the feedback Jeff and tt - some good ideas to ponder. Much appreciated!Cheers,Scott

[bryanandrade]

Hey man, I liked it a lot, Love the harmonies in the chorus. I can definitely see Pink singing this song. Nice guitar solo too, awesome.If I may ask... How'd you record the drums?Nice job!

[ottlukk]

Scott: I liked all of it. Sort of a "you don't know what you got 'til it's gone" attitude. A universal theme that should find appeal. Would love to hear a female singer on it.Ott

[watksco]

Oct 2, 2009, 10:23pm, bryanandrade wrote:Hey man, I liked it a lot, Love the harmonies in the chorus. I can definitely see Pink singing this song. Nice guitar solo too, awesome.If I may ask... How'd you record the drums?Nice job!Thanks Bryan - appreciate the listen. The drums are EZDrummer (just the standard pop/rock kit). Scott

[watksco]

Oct 3, 2009, 2:40pm, ottlukk wrote:Scott: I liked all of it. Sort of a "you don't know what you got 'til it's gone" attitude. A universal theme that should find appeal. Would love to hear a female singer on it.OttCheers Ott - I'll let it percolate for a little while - a few tweeks to happen yet I think - then I'll get some actual vocal talent in. thanks for the feedback.Scott

[k o star]

Wow... yea man... very good melodies here Scott...The overall mixdown sounds good to me... pretty balanced...I look forward to hear female vocals in this....Kel

[watksco]

Oct 3, 2009, 5:11pm, reasondemon wrote:Wow... yea man... very good melodies here Scott...The overall mixdown sounds good to me... pretty balanced...I look forward to hear female vocals in this....KelCheers Kel - once again appreciate the listen.Scott