A Veeery Rough Demo

[heinsite]

hey Erin--i like the chorus allot, and i'll lay off the heart surgery, it's been said...i found the very first verse a bit awkward, especially the time/space thing, i didn't get it right off, and the word "recently" hit me hard the first listen, especially when you went to the dream... i'd rework that verse a bit IMHO to make it clearer.i agree with casey on the thank god idea, and the "gone" idea clashing some....thanks for posting a rough tune, i like where it's going, the structure/music IMHO is there! BTW, like the harmony!!all the best,warren

[jwebbinspired]

Erin, I'm trying to get back on this board more often but I've been swamped with family stuff. Great song Erin! The melody is very memorable. I agree with the "heart surgery" line...I do however, appreciate your originality there I can certainly relate to lines like that...but it's a little too harsh of a phrase. I like your setup of running into this person and the thoughts going through the protagonists head. As for genre, I think you could go different directions with this one. The melodies and words are not overtly country. great jobAndy

[toddt]

Hi Erin,Not much to add to everyone's comments, but that's an awesome chorus chord progression and vocal melody - it's definitely got potential with the right production and instrumentation.Best of luck!tt