Dear Everybody........Please review........

[mcanty]

Matt - Thanks for the kind words. Do not feel inadequate because of me, please. Please don't......i promise you it is not worth it.

[ibanez468]

Hey mcanty!All I can say is that I FEEL this! No doubt! I can also definitely hear some guitar parts in there as well. I think you did an excellent job on this. Dude, don't spend too much time in parking lots contemplating life. You'll never come up with all of the answers. Just let your music address your feelings, just like you're doing. That may be as close to an answer as you'll get. Good job man!! Keep at it!I-468

[liamkelly]

Nov 29, 2008, 7:30am, mcanty wrote:I would like to get more involved in the songwriting community............I really do appreciate all of the reviews, even the ones that come off as a bit snobbish.............I really do. Don't dumb yourselves down for anybody.I would like to find somebody on here who will do a complete review of my 12-14 song catalog. I would like to know which songs have the greatest commercial potential, what they need to push them over the top. I want somebody who will ride around in their car for a week or two and listen to my songs non-stop and then give me a complete breakdown of each and tell me which direction I need to head.Is anybody up for it? I will do the same for you. I am ready to take things to the next level. Who's with me?I promise if you will do it for me, I will give your songs complete attention and give my honest opinion.MarkIf you can, might be an idea to get a few people to do it independently and look for the common threads.I'll happily have a good listen, but will probably not be able to give you the depth of critique you want. I kind of just like 'em or don't.Liam

[Casey H]

Nov 28, 2008, 8:23am, mcanty wrote:This song is called "These Voices In My Head" and was written about my never ending battle with depression. I would like your thoughts both good and bad.............I would also like to find a guitarist who can really push this over the top. I keep hearing some Bohemian Rhapsody type of guitar work in this song. Very large and hooky...............Anyway...........let me know what you think and thank you. Markhttp://www.taximusic.com/stream/188763/These%2 ... Head.mp3Hi MarkCan you post the lyrics too?A lot of good stuff going on here. I can relate to the subject. Excellent emotional expression and sincerity. I could see an Elton John style song out of this. What I think it needs is a bit more structure and clarity of sectional differentiation so it doesn't lose the interest of the listener as too much "run on". That's not meant as a demeaning word in any way-- I feel like it needs something to delineate the sections to the listener. Good stuff! Casey

[jay10music]

MARK...I'M SO MAD....CAN'T STREAM....JAY...

[mistydawn]

Your song is amazing!I could hear the guitars that you wanted....but honestly, its perfect the way it is The last half of the song was even more amazing than the first....The flow and rise of the piano with your vocals, gave me goosebumps Perfect.Great back up vocals too, nice height I have to congratulate you on putting such a personal song on here, you've got balls of steel!M

[cyndy]

W o W Mark !!!There's something in this song that very few songs can capture. I don't even know the proper words to use to describe it. It's a real substance, but it can't be touched... it can only be felt.In a strange sort of way, I'd just have to call it an "anointing." Because of that substance in this song, I honestly believe there is the potential that this song being played where someone is suffering from depression could very likely be instrumental in helping them recover.Frankly, I wouldn't change a thing about it... only because tampering with it could alter the one thing you didn't put in it yourself.God bless you, Mark!! You've MADE MY DAY!!Cyndy

[mcanty]

thanks everybody. I'm an open book I guess. I really appreciate the support

[sevenmusic]

Mark, what an exceptional tune man! I picked the vibe up on this one right away maybe because i'm an emotional writer rather a technical writer, but this one works well on an emotional level. If there was one thing I would add it would be a guitar. Other than that, I got the message. Very nice

[mojobone]

I'd like to hear a few more specific questions from the OP; it's difficult to know how to be helpful without a bit of a roadmap. Do I think you should quit your day job? No, but only 'cause it's a generally bad idea, not due to any lack of talent showin' up in your song. (if you've got ten more this good, you might even be a candidate for an artist pitch) The lyrics could use a polish; as noted above some of the rhymes aren't as strong as they could be (take break make fake, etc.) but only in a few places. The production's pretty vanilla, which is good if you're pitching this as a song demo; lotsa ways to use production elements to cast the song, could be contemporary country or on Rob Thomas' next solo joint. And one very specific point: that last tom fill is weak. Melodically, I think this thing has fairly good hit potential, there's a very strong chorus and a bridge that does just what it's supposed to do, there's both a familiarity and a freshness in the chord progression, just the right amount of the unexpected chordal and melodic twists, just need to get the lyrics on par with the rest, and that's a pretty high bar.I can hear several possibilities for guitar in this, depending on artistic direction; The bombastic Queen-style wire choir is one option, a classic seventies Les Paul raunch rock kinda thing like the solo in Nitty Gritty Dirt Band's "Stand A Little Rain" would be another, depending on where you're pitching. Maybe place a solo between the last two choruses with an upward modulation just before the final chorus.