Dean Taylor/Lee Johnson need feedback

[deantaylor]

Vince, thanks. Critical is fine. We want to know what you hear. If you don't tell us, the song might just fail later on, when fixes are more expensive. Yes, Lee can do better on the energy of the vox in the version you listened to. He will, I've already heard it in other versions! I agree, I think some 'fills' of some kind in v1 would be good .. love his eguit fills. We are considering female bvs in the chorus. Good idea?webinspired, thanks. I like the bridge, too.Matt, thanks for chiming in with some good feedback and some ala's. I see taxi has some listings for Tweedy/Tupelo type songs! I agree it has a rock feel.Doc, thanks. All opinions are valuable. No one is a hack as far as listening goes, all that matters is if you like it or not and if you are 100 percent honest.Dean

[majorshadow]

I sent an earlier message ICO: "Rise Above" and forgot to enter data on the song "Fragile"Not only does it have beautiful crystal clear audio; but the lyrics has substance. Thanks for sharing

[cameron]

Hey Lee and Dean,Is the singer actually in prison, or is that just being said metaphorically? I guess that needs to be clearer. It sounds like the guy is speaking to someone who is in prison with him:WE'VE been trapped by fate in this prison cellWE'VE been forced to do hard timeBut in the first verse you said:I can’t do for us, what I used to doI can't be the person I wasIt’s tough on me, its hard for youBut this thing we face won’t break our love Assuming the guy really is in prison and the song is to his wife/girlfriend who is not, I guess I would just change "we've" to "I've". But I do think the singer's situation needs a bit more of a story line behind it, at least for country listings.Instrumentally I really like the song a lot and I like the vocals throughout except in the first "Rise Above" of each chorus, which sort of wears on you after a few listens. I'm not sure if it's the lead vocals, the harmony or just the melody, but after a couple of listens I didn't care to hear that part anymore. I hesitate to say that because it's the hook of your entire song, but personally it's the only part of the song I wasn't crazy about. Sorry I can't offer a more concrete suggestion here, as I'm not sure. It's also a very subjective thing, so just take it as one guy's opinion.The bridge is really nice. To me it felt like it could one line longer. All in all, a very nice job, and nice guitars throughout.Cam

[deantaylor]

Hey Cam,Lee does say in his original post that this song is targeted toward film-tv. It is designed to be a very general lyric, almost all of it is metaphoric. Only some of v1 tells a sketch 'story' to make the song work. We have no intent of pitching this to country artists (or really any artist, unless we just get lucky).So, the lyric you question is totally metaphoric. It is intended to fit any number of situations that might befall the guy, that also impacts his girl (and/or family) .. so they are in it together .... Hey actually, I never thought of it before, but it even fits if he is in prison. lol 'Cause if he is in a real physical prison, they are in a very challenging situation together.Thanks for the feedback on the rest, too.Dean

[leejohnson]

Hi again,Lee here with another vocal update...attepmting to update with some of your suggestions....I tried to go for more dark/angst/emotional verses to contrast the more uplifting chorus...nothing drastic at all, just subtle addition of more vibe vocally...hope it helps. Thanks for chiming in, Dean and I value your feedback!Once again, please use this link to my site and now see the song"Rise Above 12.15.08" you can also see the previous versions all dated accordingly as I am leaving them up until we get closer to finishing. www.taxi.com/leejohnson Thanks!