Feedback for WIP Country or Pop song

[jwebbinspired]

Hello all, This is a song I started a while back and I decided to start working on it again. I think the sound is kind of catchy, the words I don't know. Anyway, I'd love some feedback. I don't really need any production feedback because I have my songs professionally recorded after I perfect the song. I'll make sure to post the finished product after my song is finished.http://andrewscottwills.com/love,%20love,%20love.mp3 "Love, Love, Love" 2006 By Andrew Scott WillsI go to party more as favor,To a friend,But it all changed the very moment,You walked in,From across the room,We’re hypnotized,We dance for a while,With our eyes,Could this be love, love, love?Tingly in my fingers and toes,Love, love, love,And I think everybody knows,Between small talk with old friends,You steal a glance,I am eager but I’m waiting,For my chance,From across the room,We’re hypnotized,We dance for a while,With our eyes,Could this be?Love,

[questor]

Interesting song...I think you are right, it has a nice catchy chorus.I PMed you regarding it.Regards,q

[slowdance]

jwebbinspired,I can visualize the lyrics............been there...............catchy chorus............will wait till you get it into a good demo form.....which I hope you do..........I like the lyric story of the "eyes"......that's where it all begins and sadly where it all ends........very good.regards,Dick

[mojobone]

Really nice melody, here; puts me in mind of Chris Izaak. The chorus is really strong, but the last line of the chorus lyric is a bit weak; whether anybody else realizes what's happening wouldn't appear to have any relevance. (unless it's her husband that "knows", which would tie in nicely with the underlying musical feel that suggests intrigue more than the rush of romance) You might want to develop the storyline a bit more.

[jwebbinspired]

Thank you, you are right. The story is weak, and especially that line of the chorus.