just in time for halloween....beware

[ibanez468]

Well, the breathing doesn't necessarily bother me, although I might decide to move it elsewhere within the song.It's not too graphic for me, considering some of the things I've heard before. That's one of those sensitive calls you'll hafta' make for yourself. "I don't wanna die"...uuuummmm....yeah maybe change that.Can't help ya' with singing decisions, other than your idea to have your friend come in and make it sound scarier. That would work. Should you proceed? I don't see why not! Maybe since your chorus sounds to everyone like a pre-chorus, you could write in a chorus? Just throwin' out an idea.Hmmm...you mean my instructions on how to post weren't clear enough? Did you try? Hmmm.....FEAAAKKKEERR!!! Sounds good though buddy! Keep at it!Oct 31, 2008, 4:57am, jchitty wrote:Good avatar for Halloween, Dave, but is that just a mock up or a really a pic of Michael Jackson....because if it is, it's sad to see that man's face even worse than it was. Ain't that the truth! I call him "Mannequin Man", cause that's what he looks like ta' me. If he were to pose in a robotic still picture, ya know, where you freeze up and stand still, he'd look just like a store mannequin, I swear!! I-468

[jchitty]

Oct 31, 2008, 5:55am, ibanez468 wrote:Well, the breathing doesn't necessarily bother me, although I might decide to move it elsewhere within the song.It's not too graphic for me, considering some of the things I've heard before. That's one of those sensitive calls you'll hafta' make for yourself. "I don't wanna die"...uuuummmm....yeah maybe change that.Can't help ya' with singing decisions, other than your idea to have your friend come in and make it sound scarier. That would work. Should you proceed? I don't see why not! Maybe since your chorus sounds to everyone like a pre-chorus, you could write in a chorus? Just throwin' out an idea.Hmmm...you mean my instructions on how to post weren't clear enough? Did you try? Hmmm.....FEAAAKKKEERR!!! Sounds good though buddy! Keep at it!Oct 31, 2008, 4:57am, jchitty wrote:Good avatar for Halloween, Dave, but is that just a mock up or a really a pic of Michael Jackson....because if it is, it's sad to see that man's face even worse than it was. Ain't that the truth! I call him "Mannequin Man", cause that's what he looks like ta' me. If he were to pose in a robotic still picture, ya know, where you freeze up and stand still, he'd look just like a store mannequin, I swear!! I-468Poor Mike...he's a plastic surgery addict...and he never realized that his face looked fine just the way it was. Sorry to hijack Paul's thread...back to the regulary scheduled song critiques.

[feaker]

DaveI am all set up with the mic for my wife to do the screaming. It is set up right along side of the this month's visa bill:)IbyYou gave excellent instructions bud. I saved them in a word document. Just got lazy. Don't think I don't appreciate it.I think I will finish it off. It's just another project. If it isn't this it would be something else.Keeps my mind goin. (what's left)MJ = patheticPaul

[davewalton]

Oct 31, 2008, 4:57am, jchitty wrote:Oct 31, 2008, 4:42am, davekershaw wrote:Yeah, maybe a pre-chorus Paul.Build up to something spectacular!Maybe get your wife to do the screaming! Good avatar for Halloween, Dave, but is that just a mock up or a really a pic of Michael Jackson....because if it is, it's sad to see that man's face even worse than it was. I thought it looked better...

[jchitty]

Oct 31, 2008, 6:44am, davewalton wrote:Oct 31, 2008, 4:57am, jchitty wrote:Good avatar for Halloween, Dave, but is that just a mock up or a really a pic of Michael Jackson....because if it is, it's sad to see that man's face even worse than it was. I thought it looked better... Really? Okaaay...

[davewalton]

Oct 31, 2008, 7:16am, jchitty wrote:Oct 31, 2008, 6:44am, davewalton wrote:I thought it looked better... Really? Okaaay... Hard to say actually... not like either face looks REALLY good.

[davekershaw]

Quote:I am all set up with the mic for my wife to do the screaming. It is set up right along side of the this month's visa bill:)You've only got one take Paul, so make sure everything is set up right!And Chits: I believe it's a mask!

[feaker]

chitsHijack away, it's good to have the company:)DaveI'm on it DavePaul

[jchitty]

Oct 31, 2008, 8:57am, davekershaw wrote:Quote:I am all set up with the mic for my wife to do the screaming. It is set up right along side of the this month's visa bill:)You've only got one take Paul, so make sure everything is set up right!And Chits: I believe it's a mask! It's hard to tell, his real face ALWAYS looks like a mask anyway. Dave is right. either way, he looks bad...poor guy.Maybe Paul can post a pic of Joan Rivers..that would make it complete.

[brindabella]

Hey Pablito! I like it! Looks like a pre-chorus to me. I think it will be great if it was a little more tongue-in-cheek. The wife screaming, maybe some howling! ( Did the Visa bill worked? A roach would do it for me!)