feedback on new pop song

[staceyt]

I recently recorded this song and could really use some feedback before I do the final mix.
In particular, I would like to know if I should add a bridge- it's pretty repetitious as is - or would it be okay without a bridge, assuming I made some other changes, such as adding different back-ground vocals and when the chorus repeats at the end, possibly having just drums /vocals, then adding back the other instruments so that the chorus is not exactly the same every time? Also, I will likely fade out sooner at the end. Thanks in advance!

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LYRICS:

Crazy For That Guy
{Verse 1}
He’s the kind of guy that makes things better
He’s the reason I am smiling
I can see myself with him forever
He always sees the good
He believes in me

He is amazing, strong and kind
I can’t get him off of my mind

{Chorus}
I’m crazy for that guy
So many reasons why
I’m crazy for that guy
I’m crazy for that guy
He fills me up inside
I’m crazy for that guy

{Verse 2}
I love to tell him that he’s won my heart
I really wanna make him happy
I have felt this passion from the start
And it won’t ever stop that’s what I believe

Ask how I know he’s the one for me
You just have to meet him to see

{CHORUS}

[heckxx]

Great song! Usually it takes me awhile to "get it", in terms of understanding the lyrics, but your lyrics are very clear, to the point, and not cheesy. I think some of the vocal melodies could be better, especially in the verses. There seems to be a lack of a compelling melodies there. The singing quality could be better, sometimes the vocals feel very flat and unpassionate. The NaNaNa's sound great, and the chorus is pretty good as well. A bridge would be a good idea, even if it is very insignificant and short. But that NaNa part almost sounded like a bridge to me, actually, so extending that might be enough.

In the ending, its probably a good idea to layer on more vocals, make it more dramatic, as opposed to keep repeating things until it fades. In the modern music realm, fade outs are probably last century; I tried putting one in one of my songs, and its definitely coming out as soon as I come up with a better ending!

Hope all of this helps!
-Jeff

[feaker66]

Hi

Song is cool.

Your vox is very muffled. Try taking some EQ lows off to cut through the mix.

Sounds like you are in a different room.

Have only a few pitchy notes. Not bad.

You vox also might be a little sweet. Might want to fire up for the vox session. Just a little more emotion:)

Biggest thing now is production. All other elements are there.

good luck

Paul

[staceyt]

Thanks very much Jeff and Paul for your comments.

I am a new member, so this type of feedback is extremely valuable and much appreciated. I will get back to work on this song and incorporate some of these suggestions and perhaps you can take a listen to a later version when it's completed.

Thanks again for your input!

[jefflaplante]

I loved this song. I was really grooving to it. With that being said, I can't hear this on current radio. I actually think this would be perfect for a musical. It remided me of the kind of song I would hear in a play and be sitting in an audience nodding my head to the music thinking "this song is awesome".

The vocal performance needs work. There are a lot of pitch issues. I would love to hear an instrumental version of this. I would want it for my ipod!

Great song, though. Good work.

[DesireeBowen]

Hi there! I am new as well, and I have found this forum to be extremely useful, so I hope you enjoy it as well!

I agree that it sounded a bit more suited for a musical, or it sounds like a power ballad/pop song from the late 70s. I don't think that is necessarily a bad thing though, (I live for seeing musicals!!) I just think if you want to make it more current, I might think about changing the piano part. I think it is the big chords in the piano part that leads into the chorus and some of the running parts in the upper register of the piano that is making me think of it as in the 70s, and it is just a tad too dramatic (which makes me think of a musical). I think if you could cut back on some of that, maybe add in a different instrument if you still want a full affect, it would really be great. I would also get rid of the fade at the end.

I love the tune and I REALLY love the nananas. I think the phrase "I'm Crazy For that Guy" is very catchy and memorable.

I don't know too much about mastering yet, but I agree that it sounded like your voice was far away. Maybe you could also bring your voice down in some spots to vary the dynamics and make the stronger parts stand out more.

Great work- I can't wait to hear what you have done with it!!

Desiree

[staceyt]

thanks Desiree and Jeff - I hadn't thought about the song being suited for a musical ....but as you said, that's not necessarily a bad thing...I love musicals as well!

Desiree, thanks for your suggestions about the piano part...that makes sense and rings true to me as well.
As to the pitch issues Jeff referenced (as did some others) -- haven't done the final mixing yet, but I will be re-doing some of the vocals anyway, b/c I can do better and will definitely keep all of these things in mind.

Jeff, when I am done, I wil get a mix for you of just the instrumentals for your ipod... (I can keep the NaNas in there if you'd like...people seem to like those!).

It's nice to meet all of you - I've performed around the Chicago area for years, but never had critiques and feedback from people in the business of writing/recording, etc. -- so this is REALLY super helpful and I look forward to getting to know you guys and your music! I've been making my way around and listening to your music as well...have been impressed so far!

Thanks again for your comments.

[deantaylor]

Hi Stacy,

Welcome to the forum. Good to have you here.

I think the song could benefit from a bridge. I'd do something a little different lyrically in the bridge. Since the rest of your lyrics are very general .. in the bridge, I might give some very specific examples of why you are crazy for this guy .. like he holds the door open for you, he remembers your birthday, he buys you flowers ... whatever.

I like the hook.

The vocals do seem a little muffled.

HTH.

Dean

[staceyt]

Hi Dean,

Thanks for your suggestion. I agree - the song could benefit from a bridge and getting more specific with the lyrics makes perfect sense. Thanks so much for listening!

P.S. - with regard to the genre - what comes to mind? Did you have the same thoughts as some of the others that it sounds suited for a musical? Since joining taxi, categorizing my songs has been more challenging than I expected!

Thanks again,
Stacey

[deantaylor]

I heard it as more adult contemporary than musical, but it is a bit hard for me to classify this one, too.