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Post by jakyla » Tue Jan 27, 2015 9:12 am

I'm brand new to Taxi and to lyrcs composition. So I thought I would post a few pieces and get some feedback and gain the benefit of the Forums experience.
 I write lyrics only and would love to work with someone who has music abilities to create some completed songs. They, adding music to my words and I, lending words to thier music

I can be reached at jakyla@northrock.bm

"COPYWRITE"
JULY 2, 2014
Winston Jay Jones

                              LOVE
                              (One)
Your soft, candied kisses linger free in the wind,
unclothing and exposing all my dormant  desire 
tomorrow is our day and it will all sink in.
My world belongs to me and you are all I see,
the aspects, contours and fragrance of your life,
I want to undress you and call you my wife.

                            (Chorus)
I'll feed your mood, then taste your emotion,
living inside your consuming potion,
always lost in your soul's smokey ocean.
You are my all night, daydream delusion,
what we share last five streets past illusuion,
Baby, I going to be your one and only conclusion.

                               (Two)
Lying drenched and blessed in the power of our tomorrow,
every minute of you baby is worth an hour.
You spent on me most of your previous time,
now your potential wanders all through my mind.
Sooner rather than later, one day you will discover,
you are my worlds best, my only lover.

                               (Three)
You are so close, you are under my skin,
once you were too forbidden to touch,
I have no idea where I end and where u begin.
I see you love the love you want and need.
With us, one plus one always equal more,
now one plus one equals even more than the day before.                       

                                                                                         W. Jay Jones

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Post by Geir » Tue Jan 27, 2015 1:03 pm

Hi Jay,
I'm glad to see you followed my advice and found Taxi.
Welcome.
Great lyrics!

Geir

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Post by jakyla » Tue Jan 27, 2015 1:39 pm

Is this Olaug Tvedt Keys?

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Post by Geir » Wed Jan 28, 2015 4:14 am

No. That's my wife.
I'm the hubby - Geir

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Post by jakyla » Wed Jan 28, 2015 9:40 am

Ohh ok Geir,

ThaNks for the Taxi info. Also appreciate your kind words on the lyrics.
I'm open to any feedback n critique u might hv on my pieces. Trying to get better n move it to the next level so I'll take any suggestions u hv to offer a beginner like myself

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Post by Geir » Sun Feb 01, 2015 1:28 pm

Hi Jay,
There are so many people out there who know much more than I'll ever know about this business.
So the best advice I can offer is to follow everything that is happening on this board, get involved on it and ask questions, follow Michael on Taxi TV, make sure you get to the Road Rally in November, and never, ever give up.
The people on this board community are all very supportive and very knowledgeable and will always try to help in any way they can, so just hang in there and use their wisdom and experience to get to the next level.

Geir

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