Visceral emotional phrasing

[wendylanders]

Hi all,

I need more of an explanation on a return I got:

"Visceral emotional phrasing tends to be a more relied upon lyrical approach by the powers at be within film/tv. The idea is that emotional phrasing will allow the song to loosely support film/tv scenes. "

On the song I wrote for the cue, I painted too many word pictures. They could interfere with a scene. That part I'm getting. But does "visceral emotional phrasing" mean that I'm relying heavily on repeating emotional phrases like "I love you," or "talk to me," or "missing you now," that sort of thing. Maybe I shouldn't have picked cliches. I do get the feeling that this really means I should repeat the same words over and over. For example, a plaintive cue crying "why? why? why?" a lot.

Thanks for your thoughts. Also let me know if I should have posted this someplace else. I couldn't quite figure out where to post it.

Best,

Wendy Landers

[cassmcentee]

Hey Wendy, can you link us to the song that got you this feedback?
Then maybe we can answer your question a little easier...

[Len911]

Good question Wendy.

Instead of using a traditionally structured verse-chorus pop song, maybe an abbreviated structure would work better for scenes. Maybe a short bridge between the sections or at least after two, if the scene should go on that long. I don't think most of these type of scenes are that long, they just seem like it,lol!

talk to me
like you did with her last night
talk to me
can't you think of anything to say
talk to me
you evil devil
just talk to me

talk to me
blah, blah, blah
...

bridge:
I just can't take it anymore
you don't talk to me

[wendylanders]

Hi Cass and Len,

Here's a link:

https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/259 ... 20Song.mp3

Thanks for the sample lyrics. Sounds like a good plan.

I never know how much supporting materials to add in my posts.

Best,

Wendy Landers