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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by Patrick » Wed May 24, 2017 4:19 pm

Hey funsongs...

I recorded what I had before, just to give you an idea of where I was going with the song.

This is me and my little pre-teen daughter. She doesn't really know the song and is just shadowing me. I just played my sloppy guitar into her IPhone and we sang together.

It's really hack, but it should give you a vision I had for this tune. I actually think it's a country song. :)

http://picosong.com/MrvP
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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by Patrick » Wed May 24, 2017 4:47 pm

I know...I know...It's a truly awful track, but I still think it's kinda cute in a father/little daughter kinda way. :)
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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by funsongs » Wed May 24, 2017 6:05 pm

It's charming; you've got a star-in-training... good chops, Pops! :P
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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by Patrick » Wed May 24, 2017 6:32 pm

Thanks funsongs!

I still remember your song Don't Stand in My Way...I believe that was the title. I really enjoyed that little ditty.

I'll make you an offer. If you have the time and interest, I'd love to hear your version of what I have presented. I'll even send you a crisp hundred dollar bill for your efforts. I still believe it to be a potential country song.

Eh? Huh??

We got a deal? :)

(If you're too busy or not keen, I totally understand. Unfortunately, I have more money than talent at this point)
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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by Patrick » Wed May 24, 2017 6:54 pm

Ideally I'd love for Ben Haggard to sing my song...I really slip into this stuff!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ChHrwJ_CX8s
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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by funsongs » Thu Jun 29, 2017 10:33 pm

Patrick wrote:Thanks funsongs!

I still remember your song Don't Stand in My Way...I believe that was the title. I really enjoyed that little ditty.

I'll make you an offer. If you have the time and interest, I'd love to hear your version of what I have presented. I'll even send you a crisp hundred dollar bill for your efforts. I still believe it to be a potential country song.

Eh? Huh??

We got a deal? :)

(If you're too busy or not keen, I totally understand. Unfortunately, I have more money than talent at this point)
Hey - Patrick
First - Don't Stand In My Way was, indeed a co-write - I put together the instrument & vocal track, mostly myself - hired a few players to add the ear-candy;
and the studio engineer who let me record & direct the mix. The author of the lyrics & melody came by way of hearing the raw demo on Soundcloud.
I contacted the lady and asked if I could produce the track. What you hear is the results of that collaboration.

https://soundcloud.com/funsongs-1/dont- ... ic-country

Sorry to take so long to respond to your post & offer.
I've been in the thick of finishing up several projects of my own, and didn't see when I'd have the opportunity to try to help you out.
I don't have my own home-studio recording set up - so song production for me at this point is an out-of-pocket expense.
If you still haven't produced this out, PM to me your email address, and we can continue the dialog and see where it goes.

You can also message me via Soundcloud, if you prefer.

Cheers,
Peter
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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by KBearden » Fri Jun 30, 2017 2:36 pm

Well she always wears a smile
Under green eyes faded blue
As she lays down there beside me
And whispers 'I love you'

Won't you tell me all your troubles
You know I've got some too
If we spend a little time
We can work things through

(chorus) And sometimes I wonder, could you be any more beautiful
Still I wonder, could you be any more beautiful...to me.

If I wished upon a Star
Would you make my dreams come true?
Or will you live your life promising
Those empty words 'I do'



(repeat chorus)

-Insert bridge-
A bridge is what is needed
between your heart and mind
let's build it with the pieces
we can never seem to find
this bridge is will be strong
tho it stands not yet today
the future of this love
begins this special day

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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by KBearden » Fri Jun 30, 2017 2:40 pm

this bridge is will be strong...sorry.... this bridge it will be strong

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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by PENKSLYRICS » Sat Jul 15, 2017 8:33 am

I really like what you have here and think it works fine just as it is.
However I did come up with the following, use it if you want.

In her words she asks
How I truly feel
Time now to decide
What's the final deal
Should I take the plunge
Down on one knee kneel

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Re: Anybody Got a Bridge?

Post by KBearden » Thu Jul 20, 2017 6:02 pm

Just my thoughts....


Beautiful To Me

You always wear a smile
Green eyes faded blue
As you lay beside me
And whispers 'I love you'

Won't you tell me all your troubles
You know I've got some too
as we spend this time together
We will work this love through

(chorus) So beautiful
Beautiful...to me
So beautiful
Beautiful to me

If I wished upon a Star
Would you make my dreams come true?
Or does this life you promise
Just empty words 'I do'

They say that love's forever
Till now I've just survived
I wish this love forever
And never question why

(repeat chorus)

-Insert bridge-
Chance is often taken
Upon the flip of coin
Lessons often learned
In search of love to join
with one

(chorus) So beautiful
Beautiful...to me
So beautiful
Beautiful to me

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