I need opinions on a new song

[DaLomonze]

This song I would love to put on a platform thats not just faith based because I think it can impact people in all areas. What are you thoughts on the song, on the content and what genre can you see if fit correct with? Even what type of listings....


Here's the song--> Overdosed On you <--Here's the song

Thank You

Lyrics:
Overdosed on you
Verse 1: When I stumble,
Before I fall will you catch
me.
Or will you let me,
Fall down on my knees.
When Iʼm broken
Will you trace every steps to
find the pieces of me,
Will you,
Or will cut a edge or two,
Or looks best to you,
That holds together with
glue .
Revamp: Well Iʼm just an
addictive,
Searching for a fix,
One day Iʼll be better,
For now I need a hit.
Just another notch on the
ledger,
But I canʼt pay the bill.
Youʼll be my pill, if it be your
will
Chorus: Lord Ive tried every
drug in the book
But I never overdosed on
you (Heven)
Verse 2: I love to be your
burden,
i love your the one I can lean
on,
Yeah Nothing is for certain,
But with you I know I can
dream on.
If heaven close to curtain,
Iʼm sure that choosing youʼs
the right thing.....
When.....
Iʼm crying and depressed,
Hiding from my mess,
Iʼm sure youʼll be picking
me,
Not watch me drowning in a
glass.
Never been adding to the
stress,
You say that burdens not
heavy on me.
Revamp: Though Iʼm just an
addict,
Searching for a fix,
One day Iʼll be better,
For now I need a hit.
Just another notch on the
ledger,
But I canʼt pay the bill.
Youʼll be my pill, if it be your
will
Chorus: Lord Ive tried every
drug in the book
But I never overdosed on
you (Amen)

[SteveAlton]

Love it dude....

The track has a couple things maybe you could tighten up a little in the beginning.....

Maybe lose the no vocal section??? Or add something there instead of empty space.

I think the Lead VOX could be up just a smidge in spots. It doesn't sit in spots a s well as in others and some word are inaudible...

Great tune..........

[songmaster]

Great song! I really enjoyed listening to it all. If that is your voice, it is really something. To me the genre seems to be blues with some updated background music. I can see that it is a faith based song and you were asking if it could also fit main stream. I think one tiny change in the chorus lyric could do that. Instead of " Lord I've tried every drug in the book " maybe just " Oh, I've tried every drug in the book ". Just my 2 cents and I will let others comment on the production ( which sounds great to me ).
Anyway, great song and good luck with it

Tom

[gregorym]

I don't know exactly what genre and listings this would fit, but it's an awesome song. I hope you find a home for it. Congrats on an awesome track! I love the vocalist's voice, too.

Later,
Greg