Hi everyone!
I've been writing a song and have an instrumental in place that could use some improvements.
I wanted to write a song about how love should be like maths but the lyrics so far are just... bad! It was a great idea in my head but in theory, well I'll post the lyrics I came up with and you can see for yourself
I'm looking for people who would like to work with me on this song in any way. Either working to improve the instrumental or helping to create better lyrics and any good singers who want to be featured on this song too.
Let me know if you are interested! Thanks, everyone!!
Leanne
P.S. Here is the instrumental and lyrics I have so far:
https://soundcloud.com/hobbins17/love-m ... al/s-HZ93a
Chorus
Love should be simple
Something so easy to do
Just a simple equation
Two halves together are full
Love should be as simple as maths
Add the numbers and get the right answer
If you know how to do it correctly
Put two together and make a pair
Bridge
When you want maths to be simple
Don’t try and find Mr. X
X always makes maths harder
When it doesn’t have to be complex
Can anyone help me improve this song?
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Can anyone help me improve this song?
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Re: Can anyone help me improve this song?
Well - with more time than money on my hands - and liking the challenge of a project like this; and liking your track...
I'm willing to try helping you get it to something that works, - that YOU like.
I'll copy & paste your lyrics into a WORD.doc, so I can follow along with the track... and begin crafting them to work together.
Here's a playlist of completed works that started kind of the same way.
https://soundcloud.com/funsongs-1/sets/ ... f-the-taxi
Let me know if you're interested.
Thanks.
I'm willing to try helping you get it to something that works, - that YOU like.
I'll copy & paste your lyrics into a WORD.doc, so I can follow along with the track... and begin crafting them to work together.
Here's a playlist of completed works that started kind of the same way.
https://soundcloud.com/funsongs-1/sets/ ... f-the-taxi
Let me know if you're interested.
Thanks.
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Re: Can anyone help me improve this song?
Hello!
Thanks for your reply!
I listened to the playlist and I really enjoyed all the songs on there!
Really great work!
I am very interested in working with you!
Looking forward to it!
Leanne
Thanks for your reply!
I listened to the playlist and I really enjoyed all the songs on there!
Really great work!
I am very interested in working with you!
Looking forward to it!
Leanne
Leanne Hobbins
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Re: Can anyone help me improve this song?
Hello there!
It is just a difference between American English and British English. In England, we shorten 'mathematics' to 'maths' but in America, it is shortened to 'math'
Leanne
It is just a difference between American English and British English. In England, we shorten 'mathematics' to 'maths' but in America, it is shortened to 'math'
Leanne
Leanne Hobbins
“Stay afraid, but do it anyway. What’s important is the action. You don’t have to wait to be confident. Just do it and eventually, the confidence will follow.” - Carrie Fisher
“Stay afraid, but do it anyway. What’s important is the action. You don’t have to wait to be confident. Just do it and eventually, the confidence will follow.” - Carrie Fisher
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