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can I have your critique before I submit?
Hi,
I'm pretty new to the forum, even though I've been a Taxi member for a while. I've gotten a little frustrated recently, having had my last four submissions returned. My next submission is for the listing below. Could you please be painfully honest with me and let me know if I need ANY type of rewrite,/remix/redo. Thanks for your help!
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I'm pretty new to the forum, even though I've been a Taxi member for a while. I've gotten a little frustrated recently, having had my last four submissions returned. My next submission is for the listing below. Could you please be painfully honest with me and let me know if I need ANY type of rewrite,/remix/redo. Thanks for your help!
Sincerely,
Stephen
Lots of BLUESY, BIKER ROCK INSTRUMENTAL CUES are needed by an extremely busy Music Library with a tremendously long list of killer placements in Hit TV Shows!
They’re on the hunt for a bunch of Mid-To-Up-Tempo Instrumental Cues that are in the general stylistic ballpark of these references:
Here's my cue called Wild Stallion... https://soundcloud.com/daytona80/wild-stallion-2
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Re: can I have your critique before I submit?
pretty dame good if you ask me : )
yeah! I can feel it on my tricycle and see it in the next low rider film
send it in (what are you waiting for, its only 5 dollars down as worse case scenario)
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yeah! I can feel it on my tricycle and see it in the next low rider film
send it in (what are you waiting for, its only 5 dollars down as worse case scenario)
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Re: can I have your critique before I submit?
I think this would pass if the mix were better...
At 0:12 when the lead comes in the drums feel 50 yards away
The drums have to feel stronger
At 0:12 when the lead comes in the drums feel 50 yards away
The drums have to feel stronger
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Re: can I have your critique before I submit?
Hello, Stephen...cassmcentee wrote: ↑Mon Jul 13, 2020 6:33 pmI think this would pass if the mix were better...
At 0:12 when the lead comes in the drums feel 50 yards away
The drums have to feel stronger
Yep - agreeing.
Drums up closer, centered with kick/bass locked.
Would like to hear an improved mix... good/cool/catchy/rockin tune.
Worth 'fixing'.
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Re: can I have your critique before I submit?
Cool tune. I'd mix the organ further to the back in favor of the guitar, especially after 01:00
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Re: can I have your critique before I submit?
The guitar riff is decent but it's way too repetitive, like you came up with one riff and just copy / pasted it across the entire track almost.
As other have said the mix is not cutting it, the drums have no presence and to my ears the organ as lead just makes it sound way too cheesy. I'd have expected lead guitar and some organ in the background .
Mark
As other have said the mix is not cutting it, the drums have no presence and to my ears the organ as lead just makes it sound way too cheesy. I'd have expected lead guitar and some organ in the background .
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