A listen and a look at these lyrics please?

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Re: A listen and a look at these lyrics please?

Post by cassmcentee » Fri Oct 02, 2020 11:43 am

Great Tune JP!
Just switch the verses from 1-2-3 to 2-3-1 and it all makes for a better landing
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Re: A listen and a look at these lyrics please?

Post by funsongs » Fri Oct 02, 2020 12:04 pm

cassmcentee wrote:
Fri Oct 02, 2020 11:43 am
Great Tune JP!
Just switch the verses from 1-2-3 to 2-3-1 and it all makes for a better landing
Cheers
+1
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Re: A listen and a look at these lyrics please?

Post by JohnnyP » Fri Oct 02, 2020 1:38 pm

cassmcentee wrote:
Fri Oct 02, 2020 11:43 am
Great Tune JP!
Just switch the verses from 1-2-3 to 2-3-1 and it all makes for a better landing
Cheers
Hey thanks Cass.
So let me see if I’m following. You’re saying start with v2, then C, then “3”. Are you calling the bridge “3”? And then end with the current V1?
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Re: A listen and a look at these lyrics please?

Post by cassmcentee » Fri Oct 02, 2020 3:34 pm

Sorry JP, I didn't listen all the way through the first time...
I listened to the first verse and chorus while following the lyrics, then stopped and read the rest of the lyrics.
I assumed there was a third verse from the lyrics.
So I was agreeing with "Review 1" re: you started from home
Verse 2 seems to have the better story connection as to what you would feel coming home
Bridge one seems to follow that up nicely lyrically
Verse 1 lyrics make for a great "Wrap-Up" for coming home/ every reason to stay
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Re: A listen and a look at these lyrics please?

Post by JohnnyP » Fri Oct 02, 2020 3:55 pm

Thanks Cass!

I just added a link to V1 and V2 swapped.

https://soundcloud.com/jp-pearson-1/com ... 95LhbQsaXO


I'll have to live with it a minute to see what I think.. But I get what you're saying. And thanks for listening and the critiques!
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Re: A listen and a look at these lyrics please?

Post by funsongs » Fri Oct 02, 2020 5:25 pm

:P LIKE!!
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Re: A listen and a look at these lyrics please?

Post by JohnnyP » Fri Oct 02, 2020 5:29 pm

funsongs wrote:
Fri Oct 02, 2020 5:25 pm
:P LIKE!!
Thanks Peter!
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