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Again an interesting critique

Post by Picardster » Wed Jun 09, 2021 10:03 am

Hi Fellow Passengers,

a few posts further down the line I posted a critique of "Raindrops Falling on My Window".

Okay, I tried to fix these issues and made an instrumental in addition which I submitted to this listing , which was about
"Several INDIE FOLK/POP INSTRUMENTALS are needed by a Music Licensing Company that specializes in music for content creators as well as TV shows and Film projects"

Both listings were screened by the same screener (#419), from whom I learn a lot and who obviously has a very good ear - or two :-)

Here is the submitted song: Raindrops (Instrumental)



And here is the critique:

What I like most about this song
I like the warm tones and organic instrumentation. Pretty heartfelt and melancholic vibe.

I think you could improve this song by
The track is a bit too loose, The acoustic guitars, piano and drums could be more polished and the mix could be cleaner. There are also a lot of pops and clicks which need to be fixed i.e. :21, :60 2:08, 2:11. This could fail QC.

I returned or forwarded this song because
Just missed the cut. The mix, pops and clicks need to be adjusted. The performances, could be tighter.


We can discuss missing tightness (which is on purpose here). The tune is also not played by the click - also on purpose.

Then we come to the pops and clicks. After carefully re-listening to the tune I found out that one could perceive something there. A bit deeper look showed me that this is the attack of the Rhodes which was used.

Is that really a point for q/c?

However, I fixed that by just turning the volume of the Rhodes down for these and some more tones. Here's the link to the fixed version

Thank you, # 419 for your good ears. In all sincerity. Hopefully in one of the next screenings you'll give me a forward :-)

Cheerio/Stefan

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Re: Again an interesting critique

Post by Zaychi » Thu Jun 10, 2021 2:06 pm

I don't think the "loose" comment is about non-quantized... rather, it seems that bass/drum have a different idea where the beat/swing is than the melody instruments. This makes it feel a bit chaotic, where for example the guitar comes just before or just after the base all the time.

It's a really nice tune though, I was imagining some people building a house in a frontline prairie town, starting out anew...

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Re: Again an interesting critique

Post by Picardster » Thu Jun 10, 2021 11:38 pm

Zaychi wrote:
Thu Jun 10, 2021 2:06 pm
I don't think the "loose" comment is about non-quantized... rather, it seems that bass/drum have a different idea where the beat/swing is than the melody instruments. This makes it feel a bit chaotic, where for example the guitar comes just before or just after the base all the time.

It's a really nice tune though, I was imagining some people building a house in a frontline prairie town, starting out anew...
Cheers for that comment. That surprises me a bit - regarding „alignment“ of bass/drums with guitar.

The history of the song fits to what you perceive. The bass and drums were added later. The original version is without these instruments.

I tried to keep them very simple since the guitar is playing much. I’ll overthink that. Cheers anyway🙏😊

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Re: Again an interesting critique

Post by Paulie » Sun Jun 13, 2021 4:43 pm

Nice track, I checked out both mixes. I think the performance is ok, it's a little bit picky for a screener, but that's their job. The clicks are an issue, in my headphones it sounds to me like the kick drum has a click attack. It's most obvious to me at 0:54 and 0:57. The kick at 0:50 sounds fine, so perhaps check the velocity at each of those points to see if something is built into the sample?
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