Sad Strings and Pian Inst Cue

[ballereau]

I would like some opinions on whether or not this song (at link) fits the scope listed directly below. Thanks in advance.
Larry


Please submit modern Piano and String Instrumental Cues that could pull at the listeners' heartstrings. Craft your Cues around a singular motif, and create a sense of forward momentum and dynamics by layering instrumentation in and out as they progress. If you plan on using virtual piano or string instruments, they should sound like the real thing and not dated, stiff, or obviously MIDI-driven. Please be sure that your production is high-quality and current-sounding, as well.

Submissions should be about 2 minutes long, give or take, and have non-faded, buttoned/stinger endings. Do NOT copy the references in any way, shape, or form. Use them only as a general guide for tempo, tone, and overall vibe. Broadcast Quality is needed.
https://www.taxi.com/my/artist/songs/je ... IAUw-taken
https://soundcloud.com/user-670503092/t ... 731d3920fe

[AlanHall]

Wow! Really nice, Larry!

I like the intimate feel of the cello, violin, and piano. They may be a little too 'in your face', considering you have a female choir enter at some point. I'd consider either 1) scaling back the choir to a solo voice, or 2) pushing the instruments back away from the listener by about 50 feet or so (on stage as opposed to in a parlor). Along with that thought, I felt the piano and violin were both a bit bright in spots.

Consider choosing different VIs, or a subtle remaster, and submit! Definitely fits with the refs from what I remember.

[ballereau]

Thanks

[DBarnett]

Wow! Really nice, Larry!

I like the intimate feel of the cello, violin, and piano. They may be a little too 'in your face', considering you have a female choir enter at some point. I'd consider either 1) scaling back the choir to a solo voice, or 2) pushing the instruments back away from the listener by about 50 feet or so (on stage as opposed to in a parlor). Along with that thought, I felt the piano and violin were both a bit bright in spots.

Consider choosing different VIs, or a subtle remaster, and submit! Definitely fits with the refs from what I remember.

Hi Larry,
I agree with Alan, maybe a rebalance
I might break it down to a decaying note around 1:07 and build back from like a soft piano and increasing the "drama" going forward, adding each instrument and vocal
Then finish BIG
Hope that helps

[ballereau]

Thanks for the help

Best

Larry