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Post by irwin » Tue Jan 25, 2022 7:03 am

Hi everyone, Please have a listen to my song for I am in need of some advice/feedback. I have the lyric for this song I just have finalizing in out before I post.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HQC9MmRTK-s

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Re: Two Men In Love

Post by cosmicdolphin » Tue Jan 25, 2022 7:23 am

Is this a wind up ? :shock:

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Post by irwin » Tue Jan 25, 2022 7:54 am

cosmicdolphin wrote:
Tue Jan 25, 2022 7:23 am
Is this a wind up ? :shock:
I'm afraid no, it's not. This it just a song I have written of which I think fans will want to hear/listen to Cosmicdolphin. Thanks for asking.

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Re: Two Men In Love

Post by cosmicdolphin » Tue Jan 25, 2022 9:33 am

irwin wrote:
Tue Jan 25, 2022 7:54 am
cosmicdolphin wrote:
Tue Jan 25, 2022 7:23 am
Is this a wind up ? :shock:
I'm afraid no, it's not. This it just a song I have written of which I think fans will want to hear/listen to Cosmicdolphin. Thanks for asking.
Oh Dear

Well I have to say I echo everything that Tom mentions. This sounds like what would likely happen if I gave my cat access to the well known Bland-In-A-Box software.

Nobody with a musical ear could seriously consider it to be anything remotely cohesive. I don't know what else to tell you.

Mark

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Re: Two Men In Love

Post by irwin » Tue Jan 25, 2022 5:43 pm

CTWF wrote:
Tue Jan 25, 2022 9:29 am
irwin wrote:
Tue Jan 25, 2022 7:03 am
Hi everyone, Please have a listen to my song for I am in need of some advice/feedback. I have the lyric for this song I just have finalizing in out before I post.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HQC9MmRTK-s
Hey Irwin

Good to see you back!

I am very much repeating what I wrote about other tracks by you over the years:

- The melody instruments sound almost entirely random - meaning I cannot recognize a melody, or a real hook.
- The plucks and the bass seem to fight each other, and the pad/strings don't fit into what is going on either.
- Melody and rhythm seem to often mismatch.
- The percussion, which sounds like a pre-made loop, sounds okay.

In my opinion, this is not a songbed or an instrumental, since it does not apply to the human pattern recognition abilities (does not "feel" like music). Frankly, it sounds more like something I would have expected from my 2-year old back in the days, when he somewhat randomly hammered onto the keyboard after I switched on a drumloop.

My advice: Abandon project.

Anyway, I am curious about how "Short Pants" is going. That one seemed to have some potential to be turned into an actual song! :)

Best wishes,
Tom
I am very thankful for your comment/input. I think I am having the understanding about what you are saying so I will apply them to my future tracks. Feels good to know that The percussion sounds okay.

Irwin

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