Two Men In Love

[irwin]

Hi everyone, Please have a listen to my song for I am in need of some advice/feedback. I have the lyric for this song I just have finalizing in out before I post.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HQC9MmRTK-s

[cosmicdolphin]

Is this a wind up ?

[irwin]

Is this a wind up ?

I'm afraid no, it's not. This it just a song I have written of which I think fans will want to hear/listen to Cosmicdolphin. Thanks for asking.

[cosmicdolphin]

Is this a wind up ?

I'm afraid no, it's not. This it just a song I have written of which I think fans will want to hear/listen to Cosmicdolphin. Thanks for asking.

Oh Dear

Well I have to say I echo everything that Tom mentions. This sounds like what would likely happen if I gave my cat access to the well known Bland-In-A-Box software.

Nobody with a musical ear could seriously consider it to be anything remotely cohesive. I don't know what else to tell you.

Mark

[irwin]

Hi everyone, Please have a listen to my song for I am in need of some advice/feedback. I have the lyric for this song I just have finalizing in out before I post.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HQC9MmRTK-s

Hey Irwin

Good to see you back!

I am very much repeating what I wrote about other tracks by you over the years:

- The melody instruments sound almost entirely random - meaning I cannot recognize a melody, or a real hook.
- The plucks and the bass seem to fight each other, and the pad/strings don't fit into what is going on either.
- Melody and rhythm seem to often mismatch.
- The percussion, which sounds like a pre-made loop, sounds okay.

In my opinion, this is not a songbed or an instrumental, since it does not apply to the human pattern recognition abilities (does not "feel" like music). Frankly, it sounds more like something I would have expected from my 2-year old back in the days, when he somewhat randomly hammered onto the keyboard after I switched on a drumloop.

My advice: Abandon project.

Anyway, I am curious about how "Short Pants" is going. That one seemed to have some potential to be turned into an actual song!

Best wishes,
Tom

I am very thankful for your comment/input. I think I am having the understanding about what you are saying so I will apply them to my future tracks. Feels good to know that The percussion sounds okay.

Irwin