Feedback for some Stomp/Clap Rock

[DolfoMan]

Hey All,

Looking for some feedback on this track I did for the TAXI Stomp/Clap listing that's running right now. My first venture at a stomp clap, but not rock tunes. I still need to do some mastering work to clean up some 60 cycle hum but I'm really looking for some feedback on structure, the level of interest it keeps, and your thoughts on the stomp clap sounds (not sure I'm happy with them yet.) TIA!

https://on.soundcloud.com/eQDXb


Here's the listing:

HARD-HITTING STOMP-CLAP ROCK INSTRUMENTALS are needed by a great Publisher with an awesome track record of really big placements in TV Commercials!

This Publisher is on the lookout for Mid-to-Up-Tempo Instrumentals that could be found on a playlist with the examples below:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I_Dt8zmyeP8

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hii5C3U-jvc

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lHN-7xd ... e=youtu.be

Although the references have vocals, please submit Instrumentals only for this pitch. Some non-lyrical vocals like "ahs," "woahs," etc. are okay to include – just don't overdo them!

Please submit top-notch Stomp-Clap Rock Instrumentals exploding with tons of hard-hitting, epic energy! Your submissions should have heavy stomp-clap rhythms, engaging guitar riffs, memorable motifs, and solid arrangements with plenty of dynamics, interest, and forward motion. Current-sounding Rock instrumentation that falls in the general wheelhouse of the references will suit your submissions best. Your production and any virtual instruments or samples you use should be high-quality and cutting-edge, as well.

Submissions should be about 2 minutes long, give or take. Non-faded, buttoned/stinger endings will work best for this pitch. Do NOT copy the referenced material in any way, shape, or form. Use it only as a guide for tempo, tone, and overall vibe. Do NOT submit any material with unauthorized samples of any other artists’ music, sounds, or any other form of media. Broadcast Quality is needed.

The specific deal points will be handled on a case-by-case basis. You must own or control your Master and Composition to submit to this opportunity. Please submit as many Instrumentals as you’d like, online or per CD. All submissions will be screened and critiqued by TAXI. Submissions must be received no later than 11:59 PM (PDT) on Sunday, May 14th, 2023. TAXI # S230514SC

[Telefunkin]

I can hear what you're going for but I have a few thoughts on the track so far that I hope might help.
The guitar part is too loose (timing-wise), so the 16th 'chuckas' ahead of the downbeat confuse the groove and dilute the impact of the massive kick. For maximum thud and feelgood groove it needs to be really tight so that you sense the air just before that downbeat. I also think it would help to have a more in-your-face heavy guitar sound with much less reverb. Finally, cram loads of layers on the kick and claps to make them as big as possible. Keep the most prominent elements on the nail, but here's where you can smear the lesser layers around the timing a little to get that huge-ness. Good luck!