Heartfelt Singer-Songwriter Tune

[Kiwikelly]

Hi -- I would call that your first draft - first verse is too short, not enough story telling of HER in the verse of why he's pinning love. Important to grab the audience with you first two lines of a verse - and chorus is boring that follows, same ramble - need a good hook line - Drtowning in the waves, watching the sunset, heating up my heart that been beating over time... - drama line... written lyrics to tracks, and have any want rewrites or new lyrics more commercial, like doing new country style as they look for more songs than other links, notice pop and rick are looking for bands and artists more... hope that helpful...