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Epic Underscore Return

Post by RealPickle » Wed Jun 05, 2024 7:54 pm

Hi all,
This is my first time posting a piece with screener feedback in the forums, would appreciate any and all feedback.

I got a return for the Epic Underscore Instrumental listing. Here's the pertinent part of the brief:
Please submit well-composed Orchestral Underscore Instrumentals full of captivating, epic energy and lots of modern cinematic sounds and motifs. Arrangements that could enhance emotional impact without drawing attention away from a scene will work best. Please craft your pieces with dynamics, interest, and forward momentum by layering sounds in and out as the pieces progress. Modern Cinematic Instrumentation in the general stylistic ballpark of the references is needed. Please make sure that any virtual instruments or samples you use are high-quality, modern, and very realistic.

This screener has mentioned "Development" before in other tracks and honestly I'm not always sure what s/he means. I'm also confused by the comment about the progression since the harmonic progression changes in the back half of the piece.

At any rate, here's the feedback:
What I like most about this song
The orchestration and composition overall is sounding great. I like the style and vibe of this track.

I think you could improve this song by
It might be great to lessen the strings staccatos since it tends to get repetitive after a while. I think we can also make it less stiff overall. Some more development could maybe help. We can try changing the strings more or adding a new element that would change the progression.

I returned or forwarded this song because

Could be less repetitive (mostly with the strings).

I don't disagree that the staccato strings are repetitive, but that was intentional. I meant for that to be the engine that drives the piece forward. My contention is that the staccato parts are not so repetitive as to render this piece not worthy of a forward, and it's still quite effective and fitting for the brief. I'd love to get other opinions on this. Please be honest!

The track:
https://www.taxi.com/members/AtDl-WGNQ2 ... de-of-fear

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Re: Epic Underscore Return

Post by Telefunkin » Thu Jun 06, 2024 2:17 am

Hi,
I have to say that I totally agree with the screeners comments, especially the good ones :). However, the comments about the staccato line resonate with me too. 'Development' is the sense of getting somewhere or progression, and although the staccato line is the 'engine' I also think that it anchors the track too much so it sounds more static than it needs to.

In the 45s - 1:33s section it competes with the melody line for attention, so I found that section confusing to listen to.
Then it repeats through the section 1:303s - 2:02s so it feels like the piece is holding back rather than progressing because its a similar sound all the time.
Although from 2:02s onwards there's a variation in the part its still the same rhythmic pattern so you still get the sense of it continuing.
Basically then, the same part (give or take) repeats for 2m of the 2:30 track.
As suggested, changing registers and/or layering for the same motif (ahead of, and also within the last section) might help it move aside from other parts when needed, still bolster the heavier sections as appropriate, but also help provide more of a sense of progression.

I really like the piece but I think you can make even more of it. Just my thoughts though so see what others say. Good luck with it. :)
Graham (UK). Still composing a little faster than decomposing, and 100% HI.

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Re: Epic Underscore Return

Post by RealPickle » Fri Jun 07, 2024 7:16 am

Telefunkin wrote:
Thu Jun 06, 2024 2:17 am
Hi,
I have to say that I totally agree with the screeners comments, especially the good ones :). However, the comments about the staccato line resonate with me too. 'Development' is the sense of getting somewhere or progression, and although the staccato line is the 'engine' I also think that it anchors the track too much so it sounds more static than it needs to.

In the 45s - 1:33s section it competes with the melody line for attention, so I found that section confusing to listen to.
Then it repeats through the section 1:303s - 2:02s so it feels like the piece is holding back rather than progressing because its a similar sound all the time.
Although from 2:02s onwards there's a variation in the part its still the same rhythmic pattern so you still get the sense of it continuing.
Basically then, the same part (give or take) repeats for 2m of the 2:30 track.
As suggested, changing registers and/or layering for the same motif (ahead of, and also within the last section) might help it move aside from other parts when needed, still bolster the heavier sections as appropriate, but also help provide more of a sense of progression.

I really like the piece but I think you can make even more of it. Just my thoughts though so see what others say. Good luck with it. :)
Thanks very much for the thoughtful response, much appreciated!

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