Running out of time....

[DanielFelber]

Hello folks,
so here´s one of my songs. Any comments appreciated.
I would roughly say it´s a rock song.
I know it can be improved a lot on the mixing/ mastering section, but I have only limited
possibillities in that.

http://www.deathstrike.de/Felber/runningoutoftime.mp3

Greetings
Daniel

[t4mh]

Hi Daniel! Overall you've got the guts of a good rock track! I don't do lyrics so I'll leave that to someone who will listen to yours and give you whatever advice is need there.

I can't hear any bass or kick. Fundamental in any kind of rock is bass and kick. When you remix, back everything down, Everything, to where that bass and kick are out there. Make sure they sound good. Then re-mix but don't ever cover them up. The snare is obnoxiouly loud in particular. And I like drummers who beat the crap out of a snare. I don't like the orchestral voice your using. Its too legato although I see where you're trying to go with it. Find something with a little bit more attack or edit the voice so that it has more attack. I find myself trying to hear that orchestral part and figure out whats going on with it more than just listening to the other parts. You might also work with your panning on the orchestral thing and try not to cover anything with it. You really want to be able to easily hear all the parts, then lay your vocals on top of it.

Good Job!
Good Luck!
Keith

[jefflaplante]

The song writing is great but the performance and production need a lot of work. Perhaps you should use a demo company to record this one for you...some of those companies are expensive but they can make your songs sound like platinum records. Dorothy Wallace uses a demo company that produces some very strong sounding tracks for her, so hopefully she will chime in and give you the name of the company.

I hope I haven't offended you. This song has so much potential. I just wanted to give you that option, because that is a great way to reach that potential. Let some pros record it for you. It may be expensive but well worth it.

-Jeff

[DanielFelber]

Hi Daniel! Overall you've got the guts of a good rock track! I don't do lyrics so I'll leave that to someone who will listen to yours and give you whatever advice is need there.

I can't hear any bass or kick. Fundamental in any kind of rock is bass and kick. When you remix, back everything down, Everything, to where that bass and kick are out there. Make sure they sound good. Then re-mix but don't ever cover them up. The snare is obnoxiouly loud in particular. And I like drummers who beat the crap out of a snare.

Putting up the bass anc kick drums up in volume should be no problem. I somewhat think my monitor speakers are to blame. They make things sounding better than they are on the hifi or car stereo later on.... I noticed it quite a few times that I have to "overdrive" the bassy things when working with those monitors that they are clear to be heard afterwards.

I don't like the orchestral voice your using. Its too legato although I see where you're trying to go with it. Find something with a little bit more attack or edit the voice so that it has more attack. I find myself trying to hear that orchestral part and figure out whats going on with it more than just listening to the other parts. You might also work with your panning on the orchestral thing and try not to cover anything with it. You really want to be able to easily hear all the parts, then lay your vocals on top of it.

Good Job!
Good Luck!
Keith

I will try to use another string setup doing the orchestral parts, and I might put it more into the background. I had to google quite a few words you were using to understand what you mean


I will do a re-mix of the song in a week and see if you think it´s an improvement.

The song writing is great but the performance and production need a lot of work. Perhaps you should use a demo company to record this one for you...some of those companies are expensive but they can make your songs sound like platinum records. Dorothy Wallace uses a demo company that produces some very strong sounding tracks for her, so hopefully she will chime in and give you the name of the company.

I hope I haven't offended you. This song has so much potential. I just wanted to give you that option, because that is a great way to reach that potential. Let some pros record it for you. It may be expensive but well worth it.

-Jeff

To use a demo company to record songs for me isn´t really an option because on the long run I want to be able to produce "platinum like" recordings myself. One day I want to sit in my own
fully equipped studio and being able to hear all those little details which can make a recording good or fail...
So I prefer to learn and put my (rare) money on equipment. THanks for the cool words about the song itself.

[dtrain1234]

Hi Daniel,

What a great rock song! First off, I think the bass is too loud and I can't hear the drum kick or snare. Also, perhaps you should pann the orchestra in and out to create a better effect for the song and there's something different about the vocals, I don't know how to explain it. I think you were holding on to the notes a little bit too long. I think this song has good potential with a little more mixing and editing. Good luck.