Smooth Jazz Offering

[LittleRedChurch]

You're good. No doubt about it. Clean, and REALLY well played!!! And composed!!!

But I have to try to chime in. Two things that kinda kept this from the MY GOD!! realm: the bass and that skip in the melody. To me that bass played too close to everything else. It didn't really find it's space. Had it, I think it would have kept the song moving forward. Unfortunately I can't be more specific....MOVING a bit more. lol Then, while the melody was beautiful, it occurred to me with the second kick at the verse, that there was a 'skip' in there. A hipitty hop. Dah....da da da dahhh. I can't describe it...sorry. But, I thought, maybe out of step with a really cool vibe established. Too zip pity. lol

Like I have any idea what I'm talking about.

Great playing and a great tune.

LRC

[niallyboy]

Hey Andy,

Great feedback. I'm going with-- what I will now term-- the Beethoven rule. I'll throw my cards on the table and leave it as is.

Cheers,