could this be used in a movie...rise and shine

[feaker66]

Just made this.


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_so ... D=13726524

Fireflies… see them glow lyin there watch em come and go
An Inner peace ….a warm release thoughts of love so long ago
There’s still a flicker of light inside tucked away that once was forced to hide

It’s time to rise and shine again lose the hurt.. and get on your way
It’s time to rise and shine again don’t look back…ooo you’re gonna be ok

Your lonely heart…. torn apart…. It is healed let it love again
Baby steps a deep breath it’s been too long..your heart in chains
That little light will grow into a flame…you’ll be loved there will be no pain

[feaker66]

officially my first Casey inspired shameless bump.......

Paul

[johnlewitt]

Hey Paul,

Here's a few ideas on how to improve it.

The drums need to be louder. I'm straining to hear them. And when you do bring them up, go for a softer sounding kick drum.

I can barely hear the bass.

Turn up at that electric guitar after the first chorus!

The vocal level is nice and even, but it's too prominent, so lower the volume.

Don't do the fade ending if you're trying to pitch it for a film.

I think you've got the whole performance down, you just need to work on making the perfect mix.

Best of luck with it.

John

[feaker66]

Thanks John. I just wrote a detailed reply. Then I hit enter and the rest is history. I will address all of what you mentioned

Paujl