The Valley: Please Critique...

[jonathansorensen]

Hi,You've got real skill with language and with images. That is going to help you alot. It also can distract though. I do it all the time; come up with these great phrases and put together and lyric then find that though it all sounds great and people respond to the skill with the language, I haven't been clear about what the story is. I'm not a country writer nor is it necessary to be as completely clear as they are but you do want to leave the listener with some sense of a story. Listen to "what hurts the most" by Rascal Flatts. The lyric is brilliant. That would be my strongest advice. Start analyzing lyrics from hit songs. You obviously have talent and you'll start to see what it is they do that makes the difference between a good lyric from a talented writer and an amazing lyric that will sell a song.BTW I recommend you join taxi. Just having access to the community and road rally is worth the annual fee, not to mention the opportunities.Good luckJES